Re: ~Methinks~ by wDaphnew	9-Nov-11/1:59 PM
Congrats on your award.
Re: Subway moments by azntsarina	18-Apr-07/10:09 PM
Ditto richa's comment on the Unions Station piece.
Re: Makin' Bacon by NICKDRP	18-Apr-07/9:58 PM
I think that "neat" is the perfect word to end this on. Not only is it a juvenile complement to the whimsy of this piece, the conotation is just as Leave-it-to-Beaver, 50's-ish as a the very bacon breakfast of which you speak.
Re: I want to press my fingertips by bwaha	18-Apr-07/9:48 PM
I dig it. Perhaps some other word(s) can maintain the sensitivity of this piece better than "human life". Sorry I don't have a suitable substitute at the ready.
Re: a comment on Prince of Void by Dovina	18-Apr-07/9:31 PM
Oh, pot. At least you have an excuse.
Re: Love Bruises by Jezabele-In-Hell	12-Dec-04/4:20 AM
The title and concept are great, actually. The poem is just a very raw explaination. Give us some imagery and try to work in some poetic devices. I think you have over-explained it in this version so please don't waste your time on trying to clarify the idea in later versions. Just make us feel the way you feel.
Re: Love Bruises by Jezabele-In-Hell	12-Dec-04/4:20 AM
The title and concept are great, actually. The poem is just a very raw explaination. Give us some imagery and try to work in some poetic devices. I think you have over-explained it in this version so please don't waste your time on trying to clarify the idea in later versions. Just make us feel the way you feel.
Re: Things I Will Never Do by jessicazee	12-Dec-04/3:41 AM
Hilarious and serious???
Re: Tonight by jessicazee	12-Dec-04/3:28 AM
Wow! I can't understand the low scores on this one. Even when your writing is a little unhinged I find you establish a feeling. Maybe it's just because I'm a nature nut.
Re: Going Camping by jessicazee	12-Dec-04/3:21 AM
This is a good sketch for the poem that evolved from it.
Re: That One Time Last Summer, Remember? by jessicazee	12-Dec-04/3:18 AM
Inexplicibly good! I get a great feeling from this. Both intimate and delicate. 10
Re: Are You Experienced? by EAger to Offend	12-Dec-04/2:26 AM
That is simply because you are not experienced. But for 5 bucks a hit... you could be.
Re: falling in with the wrong crowd. by richa	24-Oct-03/6:55 AM
It's very clear, yet vague enough to keep me meditating upon the metaphor. The senile woman version sounds like it would be a little more story-like, but I'd like to read it none the less.
Re: Breasts by Stephen Robins	24-Oct-03/6:42 AM
I feel your pain. And the Coleridge reference is cute.
Re: every moment will soon be memory by calliope	24-Oct-03/6:35 AM
I can appreciate a sober thought expressed clearly and simply. Agree with Bill though, the elipse is pointless.
Re: Backyard by <~>	24-Oct-03/6:14 AM
Descriptive and fairly technical, yet somehow bland. Like a Rococo painting.
Re: Three Fall by <~>	24-Oct-03/6:09 AM
This begs for repeated reads, and gets better with each one.
Re: a comment on rainfall saga 1 by Bill Z Bub	24-Oct-03/6:03 AM
You forgot "Heil".
Re: rainfall saga 7 by Bill Z Bub	24-Oct-03/5:59 AM
Hey! This is much better. I'll bump you up to a five.
Re: rainfall saga 7 by Bill Z Bub	23-Oct-03/9:29 PM
I guess we've lost you,Bub. I love nature. I love nature poems. But, I almost fell asleep ...reading THIS>