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Prince of Void (Free verse) by Dovina Ashes of the late world
carry on bleak and temporal
mocking to and fro
the princeâs void
uncoupled from his shoring
unsupported in ashen air
trembling and brief
If only his heart were stone
Up the ladder:
You are a Fool, Dad
Down the ladder:
Holding The Ground
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Posted: April 13, 2007 7:50 PM PDT; Last modified: April 13, 2007 7:50 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.095362 Overall Rank: 6106 Comments:
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bwaha @ 64.12.116.9
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14-Apr-07/9:08 PM
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How does something "[mock] to and fro"?...That line confuses me, slightly.
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Dovina @ 75.51.248.14
> bwaha
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15-Apr-07/1:10 PM
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mocking the prince's void, showing it as here and there, to and fro.
Why is everyone writing rubish poems about other users all of a sudden they're not funny, or clever, or good. It is a practice I will be mentioning to nentwined in our next conference call on the future of this website. We are currently planning to go for an IPO in the Summer on the proviso we can get rid of some of the more stale old crones who haunt the halls of this institution.
I love the second line. I keep reading it. The word "bleak" is, uh, onomonapeida (sp?), yeah. Duh, you know what I mean and I won a trophy for spelling in 7th grade, but it phonetically intersects with its meaning? Is that the word? Or does that mean the word is the actual sound, like "beep"? God I love pot.
Also,I kind of see a empty space between the last two lines? P.S. Funny aside: the first time I read this I thought 5th line read: "uncoupled from his sNoring"; hee.
Oh, pot. At least you have an excuse.
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