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Prince of Void (Free verse) by Dovina

Ashes of the late world carry on bleak and temporal mocking to and fro the prince’s void uncoupled from his shoring unsupported in ashen air trembling and brief If only his heart were stone

jessicazee 18-Apr-07/12:01 AM
I love the second line. I keep reading it. The word "bleak" is, uh, onomonapeida (sp?), yeah. Duh, you know what I mean and I won a trophy for spelling in 7th grade, but it phonetically intersects with its meaning? Is that the word? Or does that mean the word is the actual sound, like "beep"? God I love pot.
Also,I kind of see a empty space between the last two lines?

P.S. Funny aside: the first time I read this I thought 5th line read: "uncoupled from his sNoring"; hee.




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