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Three Fall (Free verse) by <~>
I always heard your words and wondered for your core. There's a crawling sensation and my calendar is ludicrously long. I felt the metaphor, when I picked the falls. There with another, once, for a quick, chilled visit-- I questioned the brevity of that stay in that midst. And I wonder if the thunder I hear now is memory or premonition. The weight of all that water so near, skews me. You skewer me, like I'm made, missed until the Ides of October hit.

Up the ladder: Luster
Down the ladder: The daisy-chain girl

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.7
Weighted score: 6.85
Overall Rank: 314
Posted: October 23, 2003 6:34 PM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2003 6:34 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] kingit @ 67.68.48.179 | 23-Oct-03/10:04 PM | Reply
death season...life returns in March
[8] richa @ 81.86.245.108 | 24-Oct-03/12:55 AM | Reply
'And I wonder
if the thunder I hear now
is memory or premonition.'

Is beautifully put as is the opener
[n/a] abecedarian @ 164.67.82.153 > richa | 24-Oct-03/4:07 PM | Reply
absolutely
[10] Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67 | 24-Oct-03/5:56 AM | Reply
Premonition.
[8] EAger to Offend @ 65.95.242.91 | 24-Oct-03/6:09 AM | Reply
This begs for repeated reads, and gets better with each one.
[7] ARTIE @ 66.68.146.139 | 24-Oct-03/1:15 PM | Reply
It chills the warm cockles of my forgotten admonition to stay out of the water. Good vote though.
[10] sliver @ 65.178.224.61 | 18-Nov-03/8:15 PM | Reply
And I was born the day after the Ides of October, a Libra without a cause. Must have been a painful gathering eh?
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