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rainfall saga 1 (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub smile
lure
fingers
fingers
rainthunderingrain
rain thundering
thundering
rain
rain
rain
rain
rain
weave
rainfallweave
rainfall thundering at last
thundering rainfall
rainfall
at last
Up the ladder:
Old Friend
Down the ladder:
Swiftly
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Posted: October 23, 2003 7:46 PM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2003 7:46 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5717 Comments:
Hail! Hale! Heyll!
You forgot "Heil".
Oh my, the locations of instances of 'rain' have similar properties to the locations of actual raindrops. INCREDIBLE!
Gosh, thanks Mr. Angel! I'm so glad you like this poeme. It was published in Christian Women's Affirmations Monthly. Have you accepted the Lord Jesus into your Heart?
Somethings missing. Something small and important. Why do I want to read
smile lure(s) fingers also, you do not show the thread that binds the smile to the rain and its thundering. You use the word 'weave' but do not. Smile-Fingers-Rain-Thundering. All lured? Some lured by certain ones, and not others? Show me the path, the formula here. yeah, like a poem!
precisely.
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