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rainfall saga 1 (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
smile lure fingers fingers rainthunderingrain rain thundering thundering rain rain rain rain rain weave rainfallweave rainfall thundering at last thundering rainfall rainfall at last

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5600
Posted: October 23, 2003 7:46 PM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2003 7:46 PM PDT
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[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67 | 23-Oct-03/9:51 PM | Reply
Secrets

and puzzles, and
games.
[7] kingit @ 67.68.48.179 | 23-Oct-03/10:07 PM | Reply
Hail! Hale! Heyll!
[n/a] EAger to Offend @ 65.95.242.91 > kingit | 24-Oct-03/6:03 AM | Reply
You forgot "Heil".
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 | 24-Oct-03/6:42 AM | Reply
Oh my, the locations of instances of 'rain' have similar properties to the locations of actual raindrops. INCREDIBLE!
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 24-Oct-03/5:38 PM | Reply
Gosh, thanks Mr. Angel! I'm so glad you like this poeme. It was published in Christian Women's Affirmations Monthly. Have you accepted the Lord Jesus into your Heart?
[8] god'swife @ 67.73.32.247 | 24-Oct-03/6:12 PM | Reply
Somethings missing. Something small and important. Why do I want to read

smile
lure(s)
fingers

also, you do not show the thread that binds the smile to the rain and its thundering. You use the word 'weave' but do not. Smile-Fingers-Rain-Thundering. All lured? Some lured by certain ones, and not others? Show me the path, the formula here.

[n/a] poetandknowit @ 65.101.213.63 > god'swife | 24-Oct-03/6:21 PM | Reply

yeah, like a poem!
[8] god'swife @ 67.73.32.247 > poetandknowit | 24-Oct-03/6:28 PM | Reply
precisely.
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