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rainfall saga 1 (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

smile lure fingers fingers rainthunderingrain rain thundering thundering rain rain rain rain rain weave rainfallweave rainfall thundering at last thundering rainfall rainfall at last

god'swife 24-Oct-03/6:12 PM
Somethings missing. Something small and important. Why do I want to read

smile
lure(s)
fingers

also, you do not show the thread that binds the smile to the rain and its thundering. You use the word 'weave' but do not. Smile-Fingers-Rain-Thundering. All lured? Some lured by certain ones, and not others? Show me the path, the formula here.





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