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rainfall saga 7 (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub at last at last at last
at last at last at last at last
at last
rain
at last rain
fall saga
rain
Up the ladder:
I'll be your Gimp
Down the ladder:
Mike Pike!!
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.2222223
Posted: October 23, 2003 7:56 PM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2003 7:56 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.611111 Overall Rank: 12481 Comments:
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http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.174
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23-Oct-03/8:39 PM
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I imagine this series as an oral performance, and though I don't get it all, I appreciate it. The "recent" lineup here is full of weather poems tonight.
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Bill Z Bub @ 24.43.48.67
> http://mulberryfairy
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23-Oct-03/9:42 PM
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aye, it's a puzzle.
I guess we've lost you,Bub. I love nature. I love nature poems. But,
I almost fell asleep ...reading THIS>
well, it's supposed to be soothing...
ps I am not lost, I am experimenting. I'm no old pro, I'm still searching.
Difficult to write a soothing poem when the reader needs to do so much work following it.
interesting. Editing does not wipe out votes?
Gonna need help Bill. smile 1, lure 1 , fingers 2, thundering 3, rain 5, at last 8 (intentional golden section? 1,1,2,3,5,8) but that's all I got.
Interesting. The only real "puzzle" is in the title. Aside from the resemblance to jigsaws.
Hey! This is much better. I'll bump you up to a five.
What the hell did you guys smoke in Niagara? Was it you that jumped the falls and survived. Did you bang your head? Did you?
Again, you're holding back. I'm glad to see someone experiment, but as far as this lab rat goes, the prize IS the trip through the maze. This maze is nowhere, try again.
At last At last At last You've got The Magic 3 working for you here Don't foul it up by chanting beyond what's reasonable.
sounds like rain to me, i like it
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