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Love Bruises

Member since 2004 · Posted 25 Nov 2004 · 10 comments

The last time we made love You left bruises on my legs For the first time in my life I hate to see them fade For every day that passes by They slowly go away I wish they could stay forever So I would never forget How incredible you felt against me The last time we made love They are a reminder Of how intense love is How incredible sex can be I fear the day when I wake up And my bruises are completely gone I wish my love could fade so easy Then my heart could go on

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10 comments

[n/a] Jezabele-In-Hell 25-Nov-04/7:22 PM Reply

I don't think it's good..Maybe because I keep reading it over and over...I need some opinions here.

[5] Dovina 25-Nov-04/10:14 PM Reply

I don't think it's good either. Too plain. And doesn't make sense that you want the bruises to remain. Sorry

[n/a] richa › Dovina 27-Nov-04/2:50 PM Reply

because they are 'love bruises'.

[5] Dovina › richa 27-Nov-04/3:20 PM Reply

The getting of sexual pleasure from being mistreated, or hurt physically or otherwise by a partner is not something I can understand, but neither is lot of what goes on for pleasure. The way she describes the bruises on her legs sounds like kicking or blows of some kind. âlove bruisesâ â okay, whatever turns her on.

[n/a] Jezabele-In-Hell › Dovina 27-Nov-04/6:28 PM Reply

No...Just bruise easily. Wasn't mistreated.

[4] cuddlytiger17 26-Nov-04/8:23 PM Reply

I guess I can understand why you want the bruises to remain as long as possible; to serve as a reminder, proof. But like Dovina said, it's too plain.

[n/a] Jezabele-In-Hell › cuddlytiger17 27-Nov-04/6:29 PM Reply

Thanks. I will work on making it have more depth.

[6] EAger to Offend 12-Dec-04/4:20 AM Reply

The title and concept are great, actually. The poem is just a very raw explaination. Give us some imagery and try to work in some poetic devices. I think you have over-explained it in this version so please don't waste your time on trying to clarify the idea in later versions. Just make us feel the way you feel.

[6] EAger to Offend 12-Dec-04/4:20 AM Reply

[9] sir_heff 13-Dec-04/9:25 AM Reply

bruises on the heart fade much more slowly than those of the body. sometimes there never really gone and the slightest touch or a harsh thought can bring your bruises to the surface again