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Love Bruises (Free verse) by Jezabele-In-Hell

The last time we made love You left bruises on my legs For the first time in my life I hate to see them fade For every day that passes by They slowly go away I wish they could stay forever So I would never forget How incredible you felt against me The last time we made love They are a reminder Of how intense love is How incredible sex can be I fear the day when I wake up And my bruises are completely gone I wish my love could fade so easy Then my heart could go on

Dovina 25-Nov-04/10:14 PM
I don't think it's good either. Too plain. And doesn't make sense that you want the bruises to remain. Sorry




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