Re: a comment on Pushed Aside by x311	15-Mar-03/7:43 AM
I think you are missing a part of poetry, and that is the fact that each person should take their own interpretation of it. If every image in a poem or novel were to be laid out and described in detail at every portion of the book/poem, there would never be any room for interpreting it in different ways. Stolen spoils--could be my youth, could be the life of your mother--it is all in your eyes. A postcard from my sixth grade science class or maybe from your church camp--it's open to the reader's mind. Spelling everything out would take away from flexibility and relatability of the poem. Do you understand now?
Re: April Showers by mindsigns	21-Feb-03/8:02 AM
Eh, so so. Guess I just couldn't relate to it all that well and didn't really see the vision you were going for.
Re: Say the Word 'Trousers' Without Laughing by Nicholas Jones	21-Feb-03/8:01 AM
Ummm....I really had no idea where this was going. The pacing and feel of the poem seem ok, but what was the narrative of the poem trying to accomplish. I just don't see it.
Re: What the runes said by INTRANSIT	11-Feb-03/5:26 AM
A very somber piece. I think it fine except for maybe a couple spots. I don't think you want to use the word boulder in the fourth stanza and also the rhyme between edge and cage just doesn't work. But a pretty decent work nonetheless.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined	8-Feb-03/8:07 AM
The universe just seems so big and uncaring, doesn't it? And life too short... I like the rhyming scheme--simple--but the flow could have been better in spots. 'Sides that, I like.
Re: Life's Loves Lost by Jigg	8-Feb-03/8:05 AM
I can relate to the sentiment, but it seems like it was written in the style of a fifth grader who just got shot down by his crush. If you're a fifth grader--good job! If not.....uhh, better luck next time.
Re: great caesar's ghost by bondjedi	5-Feb-03/11:38 AM
Juvenile and just kinda stupid. The repeat of "get your" makes it look like you just couldn't think of two other syllables worth of something to say and on a haiku, that's saying something.
Re: NASA Fireworks by TheDevil	5-Feb-03/11:33 AM
Hmmm...I really don't think this is the right time for the sentiment expressed in your poem.
Re: Ode to my childhood by nopal	20-Oct-02/11:02 PM
I can't really relate to what is being put forth by this, so I don't really know what to say. Unusual overuse of question marks.
Re: Tunnel Vision by x311	1-Sep-02/8:15 AM
Thanks both of you guys for actually taking interest in something I wrote. Most of the people on this site just rip people to shreds for no reason. I would also like to tell both of you that I enjoy your works very much. Thanks guys
Re: Something Caught My Eye by x311	15-Aug-02/9:58 AM
i guess what i was trying to go for was that there are wonderful, beautiful things to see every day--any day. It's just a matter of seeing it and taking note.
Re: A Wish, A Dream by Corey McHattan	13-Aug-02/10:47 AM
Hehehehe...I can feel what you're saying.
Re: Who am I ? by SkateBoardGurl5799	13-Aug-02/10:46 AM
interesting. i can definitely sense the emotion and the feelings in this poem, but the way it is written is a little odd (might be what you were going for) and i think that detracted a litte for me. maybe if you use the same topic but in a different format? I dunno, just my $0.02
Re: Lincolnshire by longships	8-Aug-02/9:43 AM
a little weak on the poetic side (I know I suffer from the same thing). Seems like more of a quick narrative. I dunno, just my opinion.
Re: Digital Remembery by ifni	8-Aug-02/7:42 AM
interesting look at the "art" of music in today's digitality. Makes you wonder about everything that's gone digital today. Has it lost feeling because it's all 1's and 0's now. You've struck my curiosity.
Re: A clearer lucidity by Eric Johnson	6-Aug-02/10:54 AM
wow, really dark. full of imagery and description. some points of it seemed to jump onto a new topic without real transition (or i didn't really see), but for the most part well done. dark, dreary, and dank.
Re: Invisible too by horus8	31-Jul-02/1:48 PM
interesting. i don't really know which way to take it but this poem seems somewhat morbid in tone, at least to me. That's not bad--I actually enjoy it here.
Re: What R U? by kawakurdi	31-Jul-02/11:50 AM
I really love this poem. The sense of wondering and pondering is great. Definitely one of the better poems i've read in a while
Re: Friends Forever by x311	27-Jul-02/7:56 AM
thanks for commmenting horus8. i enjoy getting feedback, but could you please explain yours? I guess I just don't understand. Thanks.
Re: That's What It's all about. by madjack2	26-Jul-02/2:05 PM
that's what WHAT's all about? :-) Any reference to heroes makes me think of AD&D so i'm hoping that's what you were referencing here.