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Life's Loves Lost (Lyric) by Jigg No one has ever really liked me
No one has ever really said
Affection hasn't ever came my way
On this lonely path I tread
At times it gets me down
At times I shrug and laugh it off
I feel I need to leave this town
At times this life's too rough
I guess there was this one love
I guess I was naive
I'll never ever do that stuff
That's why I gotta leave
No one has ever loved me
No one has even tried
No one will ever set free
The love I have inside
I'll only love this someone
This someone, she'll never know
How much she hurt this no-one
The day she just said no.
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Posted: February 3, 2003 12:29 PM PST; Last modified: February 4, 2003 11:29 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.695122 Overall Rank: 1961 Comments:
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4-Feb-03/3:17 PM
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how sad :(
aww...
I can relate to the sentiment, but it seems like it was written in the style of a fifth grader who just got shot down by his crush. If you're a fifth grader--good job! If not.....uhh, better luck next time.
I've heard plantains are pretty good for curing the blues. http://www.geocities.com/powergasm_now/a
The day she had to go
or, the day that she said, "no". would finish this stronger, perhaps?
universal isn't it?
Very nice. Talent overflow! You rawk.
Really good i know what you mean completly -9-
you like tomatos in your salad? then, quick - GRAB YOUR ANKLES!
Great poem. It's quite vague in some parts, then again it's hard to be specific on such a topic. I feel can really relate to lines 13 and on.
The language is in need of some maturing, but the ending is good. Still needs work, but moving along.
love sucks.
I hear ya
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