It's A Long Way From Heaven

Member since 2003 · Posted 27 Apr 2004 · 5 comments

I promise to play That green checkered game If you promise to unleash The unspoken words from your heart I like to watch you like a bird With binoculars in one hand The other looking at your... ...beautiful collaboration of family ties I see a reason to live -To survive you In a game of colorful aspects Colliding against my will of misfortune I like to watch you like a bird With a glove on one hand The other petting your... ...Beautiful collaboration of family genes I hit the ceiling fan And my heart ripped open you promised to let me go you promised to show me how to do so I like to watch you like a bird With a gun in one hand The other aiming like your knife That stabbed my ugly collaboration of mixed family viruses...

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10 votes so far. Yours would make 11.10 votes so far

5 comments

[8] zodiac 27-Apr-04/5:35 PM Reply

"Colliding against my will of misfortune" is the main bad part. The rest is okay.

[7] deleted user 27-Apr-04/7:46 PM Reply

I see the progress from infatuation to failure with a family in the way, but some lines are vague: "colorful aspects" "I hit the ceiling fan"

[10] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 28-Apr-04/2:19 AM Reply

Ace

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[6] dancin_n_da_moonlite 15-Jan-05/7:35 PM Reply

very interesting......though perhaps.......a little too long................i give it ...........a 6

[n/a] Blindpoetry › dancin_n_da_moonlite 15-Jan-05/7:45 PM Reply

I wonder if my last comment influenced you on this descision.

Whatever. Thanks. :)