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April Showers (Sonnet) by mindsigns Touch the sky and bring it down
Caress it as your child
Be barren no more!
Her eyes, pure blue, towards nature's mound
Hanging above the the smile
From her face the tears pour!
So young and helpless, still fearing the world
She lets the traffic pass
and waits alone!
Her body trembles, an open door?
All attend a mass
Each in hand, a stone....
Empty space, Her beauty bruised
Innocence fade, emotions used
Up the ladder:
memory
Down the ladder:
Assassin Nation
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Posted: February 18, 2003 5:35 AM PST; Last modified: February 18, 2003 5:35 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0454545 Overall Rank: 6963 Comments:
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.30
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18-Feb-03/7:55 AM
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Your a bit too early. Maybe in April I'll empathise. But today is very cold and windy. So cold and windy your head hurts if you forget your hat.
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mindsigns @ 152.163.189.171
> Nicholas Jones
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18-Feb-03/12:07 PM
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Nicholas, if the poem was about the month of april I'd agree, seeing i just finished shoveling 25 inches a nice fresh snow from the drive way, and hey it's still cold and windy in April too- just to remind you
nice try, but you fail.
miserably may i add. watch Look at me a fucking hack a steaming mound of poo i can't see or turn back because i'm sniffing glue and i know i'm absurd for dicking with the pope it's just the way i praise the word when i can barely cope with the shit i read all day how can one survive i need a whip to properly flay i hate being alive Can you fucking blame me? You were serving cold tea.
chinese cold tea?
blue laws in california? wtf
hey horus, there is more than one friggin kind of sonnet out there, they aren't all Shakespearian, though I did like yours. Mine wasn an attempt at creating my own style, you can say it sucks but don't say it failed
Eh, so so. Guess I just couldn't relate to it all that well and didn't really see the vision you were going for.
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