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Who am I ? (Other) by SkateBoardGurl5799 Who am i?
You should know
But you dont!
I sit and think,
Why dont i know
who i am?
I think because
You've corrupted
me with all
this crap about
the president,
sept 11 and
always win never
lose!
It's all your
fault! I
hate you! I
will not listen
to you anymore!
But still i love
you!
I will always love
you but i will
never forget
who i am.
I remember now
i have black hair
blue eyes.
i'm tall and
i have
a great
personality.
then i met somebody.
It was you.
You turned
me into
a nobody.
You made me feel like
i was worthless,
You made me feel like
i didn't
exist!
I hate you but i
can't let go.
I'm so confused!
It's all
You'r fault!
But i now know
how to make a
decision.
Im making the most
important
decision of my life.
I'm leaving
you. Im
going on my own.
Till next time,
I will not be saying
Who am I?
But rather i will
be saying,
Who are you?
Up the ladder:
Virus
Down the ladder:
Hypocrites
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Posted: August 13, 2002 10:19 AM PDT; Last modified: August 13, 2002 10:19 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8333335 Overall Rank: 10772 Comments:
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x311 @ 63.227.192.5
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13-Aug-02/10:46 AM
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interesting. i can definitely sense the emotion and the feelings in this poem, but the way it is written is a little odd (might be what you were going for) and i think that detracted a litte for me. maybe if you use the same topic but in a different format? I dunno, just my $0.02
Here's a bright young take on the state of things. Shouldn't this go in your journal?
I'm sorry, this is an utter dirge. 1. I would bet my life's savings that the author is a Rage Against the Machine fan. I think they're a great band, but I buy their records for the music, not the lyrics. You seem angry, my young friend. Ever tried counselling...?
I'm sorry, this is an utter dirge. 1. I would bet my life's savings that the author is a Rage Against the Machine fan. I think they're a great band, but I buy their records for the music, not the lyrics. You seem angry, my young friend. Ever tried counselling...?
Like this one! people wright for lots of reasons, its good way to find out about yourself and who you realy are!!
Hands off Titass96. This ones mine. Quit pretending like your interested in the process of writing, when you're just blowing smoke to get your poke. Besides, I say this, "Who are you, who am I, where is god, 911, Ossama Bin fadish trend, skater chick "gurl" introspective is total shit, and I read it over, and over, and over. Go skate board. You can't write. But yer shure pretty when you question "life". LoL!
EXCUSE ME? all the other comments were pretty good but yours..............HA urs was pure crap! not to mention your poems and or should i say not poems but shit! My dog can write better than ur poems!
I personaly enjoyed the emotional outburst that was alittle more than rage if you look closly. Its not a text book example of a poem, but It made my day.
I would normally say something stupid, but considering i share a user name with her containing the word skate, i will keep quiet.
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