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Who am I ? (Other) by SkateBoardGurl5799

Who am i? You should know But you dont! I sit and think, Why dont i know who i am? I think because You've corrupted me with all this crap about the president, sept 11 and always win never lose! It's all your fault! I hate you! I will not listen to you anymore! But still i love you! I will always love you but i will never forget who i am. I remember now i have black hair blue eyes. i'm tall and i have a great personality. then i met somebody. It was you. You turned me into a nobody. You made me feel like i was worthless, You made me feel like i didn't exist! I hate you but i can't let go. I'm so confused! It's all You'r fault! But i now know how to make a decision. Im making the most important decision of my life. I'm leaving you. Im going on my own. Till next time, I will not be saying Who am I? But rather i will be saying, Who are you?

x311 13-Aug-02/10:46 AM
interesting. i can definitely sense the emotion and the feelings in this poem, but the way it is written is a little odd (might be what you were going for) and i think that detracted a litte for me. maybe if you use the same topic but in a different format? I dunno, just my $0.02




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