Re: Friends Forever by x311	27-Jul-02/7:56 AM
thanks for commmenting horus8. i enjoy getting feedback, but could you please explain yours? I guess I just don't understand. Thanks.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-02/11:48 AM
interesting poem. can't say i really understand what you're getting at, but it's definitely quite random. stream of consciousness seems like
Re: What R U? by kawakurdi	31-Jul-02/11:50 AM
I really love this poem. The sense of wondering and pondering is great. Definitely one of the better poems i've read in a while
Re: Invisible too by horus8	31-Jul-02/1:48 PM
interesting. i don't really know which way to take it but this poem seems somewhat morbid in tone, at least to me. That's not bad--I actually enjoy it here.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-02/2:08 PM
i love the atmosphere you create. I think you could extend this on further and weave quite a tale. Love it!
Re: A clearer lucidity by Eric Johnson	6-Aug-02/10:54 AM
wow, really dark. full of imagery and description. some points of it seemed to jump onto a new topic without real transition (or i didn't really see), but for the most part well done. dark, dreary, and dank.
Re: Digital Remembery by ifni	8-Aug-02/7:42 AM
interesting look at the "art" of music in today's digitality. Makes you wonder about everything that's gone digital today. Has it lost feeling because it's all 1's and 0's now. You've struck my curiosity.
Re: Lincolnshire by longships	8-Aug-02/9:43 AM
a little weak on the poetic side (I know I suffer from the same thing). Seems like more of a quick narrative. I dunno, just my opinion.
Re: Who am I ? by SkateBoardGurl5799	13-Aug-02/10:46 AM
interesting. i can definitely sense the emotion and the feelings in this poem, but the way it is written is a little odd (might be what you were going for) and i think that detracted a litte for me. maybe if you use the same topic but in a different format? I dunno, just my $0.02
Re: A Wish, A Dream by Corey McHattan	13-Aug-02/10:47 AM
Hehehehe...I can feel what you're saying.
Re: Something Caught My Eye by x311	15-Aug-02/9:58 AM
i guess what i was trying to go for was that there are wonderful, beautiful things to see every day--any day. It's just a matter of seeing it and taking note.
Re: Tunnel Vision by x311	1-Sep-02/8:15 AM
Thanks both of you guys for actually taking interest in something I wrote. Most of the people on this site just rip people to shreds for no reason. I would also like to tell both of you that I enjoy your works very much. Thanks guys
Re: Ode to my childhood by nopal	20-Oct-02/11:02 PM
I can't really relate to what is being put forth by this, so I don't really know what to say. Unusual overuse of question marks.
Re: NASA Fireworks by TheDevil	5-Feb-03/11:33 AM
Hmmm...I really don't think this is the right time for the sentiment expressed in your poem.
Re: great caesar's ghost by bondjedi	5-Feb-03/11:38 AM
Juvenile and just kinda stupid. The repeat of "get your" makes it look like you just couldn't think of two other syllables worth of something to say and on a haiku, that's saying something.
Re: Life's Loves Lost by Jigg	8-Feb-03/8:05 AM
I can relate to the sentiment, but it seems like it was written in the style of a fifth grader who just got shot down by his crush. If you're a fifth grader--good job! If not.....uhh, better luck next time.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined	8-Feb-03/8:07 AM
The universe just seems so big and uncaring, doesn't it? And life too short... I like the rhyming scheme--simple--but the flow could have been better in spots. 'Sides that, I like.
Re: What the runes said by INTRANSIT	11-Feb-03/5:26 AM
A very somber piece. I think it fine except for maybe a couple spots. I don't think you want to use the word boulder in the fourth stanza and also the rhyme between edge and cage just doesn't work. But a pretty decent work nonetheless.
Re: Say the Word 'Trousers' Without Laughing by Nicholas Jones	21-Feb-03/8:01 AM
Ummm....I really had no idea where this was going. The pacing and feel of the poem seem ok, but what was the narrative of the poem trying to accomplish. I just don't see it.
Re: April Showers by mindsigns	21-Feb-03/8:02 AM
Eh, so so. Guess I just couldn't relate to it all that well and didn't really see the vision you were going for.