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23-Jul-02/6:27 AM |
It might be just me, but usually I think of a poem as longer than two lines. This seems more like a catch-phrase or something.
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23-Jul-02/6:30 AM |
I can understand your feelings in this poem. I often feel the same. I have written a lot on this at http://snow.prohosting.com/x311 if you want to see what I mean. Good emotion.
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23-Jul-02/6:33 AM |
I really like this one. I can relate some. I love this type of basic rhyme scheme. When submitting new poems you might want to make sure that you get apostrophes in instead of ?'s. I think its a glitch if you just cut and paste text. I've had the same problem.
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25-Jul-02/1:46 PM |
Midgets are really cool so you automatically get points with me on this poem :-)
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Re: The ONE by Eline |
25-Jul-02/1:49 PM |
Awww....how cute. I dig it. Rhyming pattern is pretty basic (it's the same one I usually use for my improv comedy games), but I think it's cool
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Re: grope by Mister Cakes |
25-Jul-02/1:51 PM |
hmmm....hmmm....I guess that's all I got on this one.
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Re: A Vision of Dark Desire by crims0ngh0st |
26-Jul-02/8:14 AM |
Hmm...seems kinda S&M-ish. :-) I actually like it, though. For some reason it clicks with me.
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Re: A strange Wonder by mozac |
26-Jul-02/9:12 AM |
Kind of light and easy-flowing. I could see someone out in the middle of an open field saying this all philisophically
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26-Jul-02/9:15 AM |
This seems more like some rambling prose broken up into different lines than actual poetry. I think it would work better as prose and not poetry. Just doesn't work as it is.
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Re: love is true by -=??lilaznjen??=- |
26-Jul-02/2:03 PM |
cute, but very short. I tend to see things like this as more just witty saying than actual poetry, but that's just me.
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Re: That's What It's all about. by madjack2 |
26-Jul-02/2:05 PM |
that's what WHAT's all about? :-) Any reference to heroes makes me think of AD&D so i'm hoping that's what you were referencing here.
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26-Jul-02/2:08 PM |
nice, but it just seems to come to an abrupt, rough end. if extended longer, i think it could be better. or maybe have the last line end on a rhyme. if you leave out the last line that you have, i think this poem would rock. i really enjoyed it.
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