regarding some deleted poem...	13-Mar-03/9:25 AM
most excellent. nicely done. tengo fuego en mi pantalones.
Re: Grampa's Proverb by OneFingerAnswer	13-Mar-03/9:27 AM
grandpa liked moonshine, didn't he?
Re: Missing You by psychedelic	13-Mar-03/9:28 AM
get rid of addressing the reader as "you", and escape from the ordinary in line 2.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Mar-03/9:29 AM
Nicely Done.
Re: Crucifixion by Mr Pig	13-Mar-03/9:30 AM
I like wine and bread, too.
Re: Hippy's Ode to Eternity by bondjedi	13-Mar-03/9:31 AM
title stinks. first two lines are great. last is lacking.
Re: Aries, the God of war by Shardik	13-Mar-03/9:33 AM
hooving rams crash horns
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Mar-03/9:33 AM
lacks depth i think.
Re: Loud Taps by celiff	13-Mar-03/9:34 AM
title must go--eliminate redundancies--haiku is too short for repetition.
Re: Beer by Yardbird	13-Mar-03/9:38 AM
the title gives too much away and makes it ordinary.
Re: Litany of the Mullet by Shin-Bojangles	13-Mar-03/9:39 AM
I get it.
Re: Harry Potter and the philosophers stone by ==Doylum	13-Mar-03/9:41 AM
what a chewy lumpo of dung. also not a haiku.
Re: Got Balls? by Yardbird	13-Mar-03/9:42 AM
tasty. sounds chewy.
Re: Coloured waifs home by horus8	13-Mar-03/9:44 AM
OK
Re: Shadow's First Attempt at Haiku by loneshadow29	13-Mar-03/9:45 AM
keep trying. avaoid cliche's that sound like elton john songs.
Re: Pinjur by Shardik	13-Mar-03/9:46 AM
god with a small i. catchy.
Re: Stuck in the Past... by loneshadow29	13-Mar-03/9:47 AM
somebody bored? Don't like history class?
Re: this can be no more than shit by Crakyamuni	13-Mar-03/9:48 AM
weak
Re: The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted by OneFingerAnswer	13-Mar-03/9:52 AM
work out redundancies...
Re: You'd think by ~incarnate~	13-Mar-03/9:53 AM
4-6-6 ? Do over.