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Coloured waifs home (Haiku) by horus8 Louis Armstrong blows
out a song for the orphans
They will sleep tonight
Up the ladder:
My Reason For Love
Down the ladder:
what I saw at work today
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.9
Posted: October 23, 2002 9:05 PM PDT; Last modified: June 12, 2003 8:28 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.45 Overall Rank: 728 Comments:
Wistful. Very lovely.
Very wistful indeed, surprisingly for you. This is lovely.
nice and short. also surprising from you. a little sentimental. not sure you can have orphans in a poem unless they are being thrown from a bridge.
if I EVEN thought you could play the trumpet, i would have voted.
Maybe you should try it, or at least the coronet. red lips rule.
And you were an orphan too. Wow. the life of a hard knock.
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OK
yes a good haiku wistful is a word everyone seems to use. I think it apt
right on the head.
this is actually a senryu
This is actually a chancrous cock on a string
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And yes, I am a pedant.