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what I saw at work today (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
nimble grey mouse can't tremblekick out of this sticky square fate. I count only four paws how did you move so fast between the shopgirl's legs? insignificant soft dart on smudged tiles and under doors in a world no one knows I'm truly sorry but you've got to go.

Up the ladder: Coloured waifs home

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.9
Weighted score: 6.45
Overall Rank: 723
Posted: December 28, 2002 11:03 AM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2002 11:03 AM PST
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[9] wOrnella Mutiw @ 198.81.26.167 | 28-Dec-02/12:12 PM | Reply
hahaaaaaaaaa....have you seen the rats in the subway stations in NYC...holly shit...they are huge! Anyway, here's a 9 for making me laugh.
[9] ecargo @ 64.252.76.29 | 28-Dec-02/12:18 PM | Reply

Good work, Mr. Bub. Deserves a better title.
[9] nentwined @ 12.107.1.131 | 28-Dec-02/3:22 PM | Reply
damn. cheeky but poignant.

I like the title (what I saw at work today), though perhaps something fancier might identify it better.
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.134.108 | 29-Dec-02/12:25 AM | Reply
Did you throw him in the can and close the lid?
[9] daniella @ 200.68.205.112 | 14-Jun-03/9:29 PM | Reply
squeaky dissertation
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