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Loud Taps (Haiku) by celiff Rain is a Tap Dance
Tap, Tap, Tap upon my brow
Boom, claps the thunder
Up the ladder:
Are You?
Down the ladder:
I wish...
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Posted: March 5, 2003 7:36 PM PST; Last modified: March 5, 2003 7:36 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.5389576 Overall Rank: 12711 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215
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5-Mar-03/9:52 PM
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Great! I love the way you take seemingly inert elements of nature and give them a vibrant personality! TOOT (Ten out of ten)!!!
This reminds me of this one time in the bathroom stall I was tapping the divider...TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP I know ur in there lol TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP holmes, homeslice TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP TAP then he shot himself in the face like in Full Metal Jacker. Pie-Ull! KABLAM! Get it??
how kindergarten like. I bet kids would love this--nice rhythm and simplicity... bad title, though.
title must go--eliminate redundancies--haiku is too short for repetition.
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