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Beer (Haiku) by Yardbird Liquid bread, on tap,
A poor man's Ambrosia,
Piss in pint glasses.
Up the ladder:
Stranger
Down the ladder:
hermetic
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Posted: October 29, 2002 1:57 AM PST; Last modified: October 29, 2002 1:57 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7502 Comments:
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==Doylum @ 213.122.52.24
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29-Oct-02/4:18 AM
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poo
A tepid effort. 2.
Tepid - good word, considering the subject of the poem (I hate beer with a passion, hence the poor quality of the poem - I'm not going to grace such a vile liquid with good verse now, am I?)!
yeah lol nice one!111 except that if you wrote a good poeme about how crap beer was you wouldn't exactly be 'gracing' it, would you?
Ok, fair comment, and seeing as I've run out of decent excuses, my only answer is that I simply couldn't be bothered (shame on me, I know) - it is only beer, after all!!!!!
Though I agree with your verdict on beer (though may I add it should be 'horse piss'), as a poem this is almost as detestable as the subject. Or was that the point?
i agree with the chick who likes horse piss. everytime, actually.
And this is why I end up looking like a working class hooker!
Loser! It needs to be longer than 3 lines you shit, keep up the jazz!
Or drink some bleached piss!
Dude, it's a haiku - they only have three lines (wanker!!)!!!
Oh, and thanks for the advice, but I'm sorry, I must decline.
the title gives too much away and makes it ordinary.
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