| Re: The Flight of Childhood by Ellie95 |
3-Mar-03/5:37 AM |
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Certainly could have had more specific images and less superfluous words. has a certain "greeting card" quality that borders on stomach virus.
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| Re: For her he swam with sharks by Shardik |
3-Mar-03/5:39 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Mar-03/5:41 AM |
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you don't need legs to dial 0. just a pink telephone--and not one of those hands-free models, either.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Mar-03/7:32 AM |
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I like it, but the first three lines could go. they are ambiguous.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Mar-03/7:34 AM |
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sounds like a best man speech. a pleasant tribute to a friend. appropriate in certain circumstances--perhaps a greeting card.
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| Re: Perversions 5: Kink vs. Mothra by razorgrin |
3-Mar-03/7:36 AM |
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odd. the words are interesting--but not rhythmically limericky.
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| Re: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike |
3-Mar-03/7:39 AM |
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extremely insightful. I read thousands of these types of poems, but just called them awful and trite.
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| Re: outside my reach by eyzwdeshut |
3-Mar-03/7:39 AM |
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read: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' (by zero)
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| Re: outside my reach by eyzwdeshut |
3-Mar-03/7:40 AM |
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read: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' (by zero)
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| Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined |
3-Mar-03/7:42 AM |
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a good attempt. seems to miss saying something important.
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| Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined |
3-Mar-03/7:44 AM |
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| Re: Karma by blankel |
3-Mar-03/7:46 AM |
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almost funny. almost serious. tough to do well. the rhyme scheme makes it hard to take seriously.
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| Re: i said, he said by eyzwdeshut |
3-Mar-03/7:53 AM |
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nice form, trite topic, but nice form. perhaps more precise images or specific details...
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Mar-03/7:55 AM |
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interesting descriptions. I enjoyed this.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Mar-03/7:56 AM |
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ack! a fork in the road? old old old. very blah and ordinary.
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| Re: The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
3-Mar-03/7:58 AM |
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lose comma after "city". lose second stanza.
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| Re: Manifest Destiny by wordontheverge |
5-Mar-03/9:57 AM |
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bravo, bravo. you should be proud of this. Can I use this in one of my classes? (I am a teacher)
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13-Mar-03/7:26 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Mar-03/9:17 AM |
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interesting, but it doesn't quite hit it.
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| Re: Tears For You by mckenzie |
13-Mar-03/9:22 AM |
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