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i said, he said (Free verse) by eyzwdeshut
i said he said i laughed, i cried you left, you went i loved, i died you let me go a thousand ways you walked away a thousand lies you didn't know i lovd you still i loved you then but i needed more & i love you now i turned my back but that is all i closed the door my heart will allow i bruised your soul i listened, i learned i brok your heart you taught me well but then my guilt & in the past tore me apart i will not dwell forgive my faults no more hurt forgive my lies no more shame a second chance never again another try? to feel that pain don't walk out i gave to you don't walk away what i could give give me an hour i'm moving on give me a day it's time to live.

Down the ladder: Scars

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7660
Posted: March 2, 2003 8:48 PM PST; Last modified: March 2, 2003 8:48 PM PST
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Comments:
[6] hipster flare @ 209.68.66.203 | 3-Mar-03/7:53 AM | Reply
nice form, trite topic, but nice form. perhaps more precise images or specific details...
[7] TanHand @ 68.14.26.239 | 3-Mar-03/9:31 PM | Reply
Boring, nice layout.
OKAY WHERE DO YOU WANT ME TO PUT
THIS LARGE RATHER SUGGESTIVE BUT
COMPLETELY INNOCUOUS REAM OF PAPER

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DUDE YOUR MINDS ARE SO IN THE GUTTER
[7] TanHand @ 68.14.26.239 | 3-Mar-03/9:32 PM | Reply
Oh dear no I've embarassed myself.
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