| Re: calendared by cobalt |
24-Sep-02/8:14 PM |
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Stanza 3 is brilliant! The title rips me from the garden and plants me right back in the mundane. In spite of that, I like this poem. 9/10
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| Re: a comment on Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof |
23-Sep-02/7:27 AM |
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I pictured a man as well. The title set me up for it. I like it better now. ;)
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| Re: a comment on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
23-Sep-02/7:08 AM |
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Wasn't it you that said another of my poems reminded you of Dylan? Anyhow, I won't change it, you'll just have to sing it from now on. ;)
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| Re: Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan |
23-Sep-02/6:57 AM |
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As a Woman I feel that this poem is grossly gender bent! ;)
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| Re: a comment on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
23-Sep-02/6:50 AM |
I'm happy to see this getting high marks. Thank you one and all!
I chipped away at this gem for weeks! It originally had 10 stanzas. I wasn't too sure about the repeated refrain but after its honing I thought it could work. perhaps you're right.
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| Re: Bitter as Wormwood by vulcan |
23-Sep-02/6:40 AM |
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A Curse upon all who decimate such sacred ground! Great poem! My wormwood has over taken the path in my herb garden but I love her still. You should see how she shines in moonlight! 10/10
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| Re: Pilgrim by timfowler |
23-Sep-02/6:33 AM |
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I like it however I'm not crazy about the use of 'flaring'. I stumbled on that one line. over all I give it a 7/10
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| Re: For James Thomson(1834-1882):an Epitaph by vulcan |
23-Sep-02/6:27 AM |
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I love this. now I must go find that city and see it for myself. 9/10
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| Re: NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8 |
17-Sep-02/11:51 AM |
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I thought the message was pretty clear. Christianity is the bane of humanity. 10!
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| Re: Full Fathom Five by vulcan |
17-Sep-02/11:37 AM |
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rides on the cusp between dark and light, this too is gray. and I like!
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| Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus |
6-Sep-02/9:45 PM |
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| Re: Narcissus by proteusplum |
6-Sep-02/2:48 PM |
interesting that this just happened to follow Horus' fine gem.
how diaphanous. This poem is brilliant! The best yet! 10/10!!
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| Re: Pigeons by Limness |
6-Sep-02/1:49 PM |
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You're good, very good. 9/10
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| Re: Pagan ME King by proteusplum |
6-Sep-02/1:43 PM |
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Too bad about >do not float me out to sea> you seemed like a good candidate for a Viking funeral. Pity really, they're my favorite.
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| Re: Crop Circle by Lenore |
6-Sep-02/1:26 PM |
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Can you imagine my disappointment? I had high hopes for that film. Silly me, I thought it was going to be about Crop Circles. Instead they tried to spoon feed us crap about faith. Oh I did get a good chuckle at all the inappropriate moments. Aliens of superior intelligence rendered lifeless by water, come to a planet covered in such without so much as a wet suit?! Let the record show that this poem is in no way related to or in reference of that deplorable film.
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| Re: *I am me* by savannah |
6-Sep-02/11:49 AM |
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I like this! And why can't she be all those things? Are we not the stuff of stars? 7/10
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| Re: At the Olde Absinthe by Limness |
6-Sep-02/11:41 AM |
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Wonders of wormwood my dear.
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| Re: Celebration by unknown |
6-Sep-02/11:30 AM |
You naked scalp breathed cinnamon
?? Now I like this poem, but for the life of me I cannot see how that line is first rate. A bald head inhaling spice? I don't get it.
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| Re: A Musical Dream by vulcan |
6-Sep-02/11:25 AM |
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It's no Rocky Horror Picture Show but it will do....... I suppose. ;)
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| Re: d e e p e r by daniella |
3-Sep-02/9:20 PM |
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This reminds me of a Beatles tune, the name of which escapes me at the moment. The format made it a bit hard to read but It does evoke the feeling of drifting softly down beneath the sea. nice! 7/10
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