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More 7-Eleven holdups. (Haiku) by Bachus
Hey! Fuck you Kim Chong! I want quick picks and zig zags. Don't look at my face! You! Reach for the sky! Give me all your malt liqour. Do you have chore-boy? Excuse me lady! But get on the fucking ground! By the way, nice hat. Guess what college boy! This just aint your lucky night. Drop your pants punk ass.

Up the ladder: If We Lived
Down the ladder: happy hour

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.7272725
Weighted score: 5.3636365
Overall Rank: 3279
Posted: September 6, 2002 4:48 PM PDT; Last modified: September 6, 2002 8:00 PM PDT
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[10] god'swife @ 209.178.176.95 | 6-Sep-02/7:56 PM | Reply
Perfect. You have left thirsting for more. Someones probably going to whine at you that the 4th has 8 syllables instead of 7, so you might want to change <isn't> to <ain't>. I don't give a fuck, these are perfect for a monologue. The Haiku bandit.
[n/a] Bachus @ | 6-Sep-02/8:02 PM | Reply
hey sis! thanx...could you revote later when you get a chance..i re-edited...the wife and kids home too so, you know...if you want to talk to nad. love jb.
[8] poetandknowit @ 65.101.212.119 | 6-Sep-02/8:21 PM | Reply
Ha! Clever and funny. Your ID self is improving.
[n/a] Bachus @ | 6-Sep-02/8:35 PM | Reply
thanks...have you tried the soup? i hope you have...i believe your id has been developing these days also...you'll have to excuse me..i have to step out for the friday night hustle...we'll speak again soon. bye.
[8] Lenore @ 64.252.97.83 | 6-Sep-02/9:45 PM | Reply
Hey! These would be great at: http://www.templeofblackjesus.com
Funny shit! Solid 8!
[n/a] Bachus @ | 7-Sep-02/1:47 PM | Reply
yeah! a solid 8 inches of hard hoodlum cockiness. Do you think it was wrong of me to not rape them all, plus take the money...i'm a ham for those convenience store cameras. smile.o
[n/a] <~> @ 24.44.185.41 | 7-Sep-02/1:54 PM | Reply
it was very wrong. you know they wanted it. plus, they WERE asking for it, weren't they?
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > <~> | 8-Sep-02/9:09 AM | Reply
Like a bull sees red... i see the green uniformed top and whiff the body odor...eyes rolling back my hand caress the pistils hard wooden handle....it's almost time to present my disclaim at the counter....mohammed, had better be cool and comply, or i'll chew the fucking towel off of his head and under mount his camel...high ho silver..away!
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