poemranker ::d e e p e r by daniella

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Free verse № 13034

d e e p e r

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 Sep 2002 · Edited 14 Oct 2002 · 10 comments

t h a t i c o u l d i w o u l d s w i m d o w n d e e p e r t o t o u c h w h a t m a y h a v e b e e n i n a s e a o f t i m e l e s s n e s s. t o f i n d y o u t h e r e s t a n d i n g f i r m l y o n t h e s a n d s o f y e a r s b e t w e e n u s. t o b r i n g m e c l o s e r s h i f t i n g t h e s e d i m e n t b e n e a t h s t i r r i n g t h e w a t e r t o e m b r a c e u s i n a c l o u d w h e r e n o t h i n g i s a s is a n d c o u l d t h a t w e w o u l d a l w a y s b e.

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[7] Lenore 3-Sep-02/9:20 PM Reply
This reminds me of a Beatles tune, the name of which escapes me at the moment. The format made it a bit hard to read but It does evoke the feeling of drifting softly down beneath the sea. nice! 7/10
[7] Frass 15-Oct-02/6:15 AM Reply
You're on to something, here, danll; perhaps just a few word tweaks. Reminds me of John Lennon's "Julia" and "It's just the Motion" by Richard and Linda Thompson.
[7] Frass 15-Oct-02/6:15 AM Reply
You're on to something, here, danll; perhaps just a few word tweaks. Reminds me of John Lennon's "Julia" and "It's just the Motion" by Richard and Linda Thompson.
[9] Christof 15-Oct-02/9:42 AM Reply
If it reminds me of any Beatle it's George - 'Within You Without You', that kind of thing.
[n/a] daniella › Christof 21-Oct-02/6:01 AM Reply
who would have thought the beatles could permeate so long after and so far into?
[9] Christof › daniella 21-Oct-02/6:04 AM Reply
I bet they didn't think they would. It's amazing how they have burrowed into the consciousness. To be so simple and ambitious at the same time, and to bring it off...
[n/a] daniella › Christof 21-Oct-02/8:42 PM Reply
ay there's the rub!
[9] horus8 15-Oct-02/1:29 PM Reply
this is concrete and WINS THE HORUS 8 GOLDEN Q-TIP AWARD ON THIS FINE DAY. loved it! have a fine navy day.9.
[n/a] daniella › horus8 21-Oct-02/6:08 AM Reply
dear horus, won't you come out to play. you always brighten the comments page, ne'er ye mind the dialogue. i can see you standing-clapping-tie-flying-tux-in-sneakers applause!
[9] Christof 21-Oct-02/6:10 AM Reply
I've just realised I forgot to vote on this - sorry! Here you are...