Replying to a comment on:

d e e p e r (Free verse) by daniella

t h a t i c o u l d i w o u l d s w i m d o w n d e e p e r t o t o u c h w h a t m a y h a v e b e e n i n a s e a o f t i m e l e s s n e s s. t o f i n d y o u t h e r e s t a n d i n g f i r m l y o n t h e s a n d s o f y e a r s b e t w e e n u s. t o b r i n g m e c l o s e r s h i f t i n g t h e s e d i m e n t b e n e a t h s t i r r i n g t h e w a t e r t o e m b r a c e u s i n a c l o u d w h e r e n o t h i n g i s a s is a n d c o u l d t h a t w e w o u l d a l w a y s b e.

Frass 15-Oct-02/6:15 AM
You're on to something, here, danll; perhaps just a few word tweaks. Reminds me of John Lennon's "Julia" and "It's just the Motion" by Richard and Linda Thompson.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001