| Re: Things by Quarton |
26-Dec-02/2:53 PM |
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wow...this is simply amazing. i love "inhumanity served medium rare"...and your rhyme scheme...its breathtaking and intense and beautiful and a TEN!!
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| Re: Blinded by Your Kiss by ThoughtfulSoul |
26-Dec-02/3:32 PM |
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i like the idea, and i liked how you worded it...but it needs more...the stanzas seem too short to really pack a punch
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| Re: Phillip by w~* ATHENA *~w |
26-Dec-02/3:41 PM |
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i like this....but i cant quite figure out what you're saying...3
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| Re: In Loving Memory of Myself by Owner of the Sky |
26-Dec-02/3:42 PM |
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haha i like the ending...its wonderful...6
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| Re: Circled Numbered Madness by rick |
26-Dec-02/3:45 PM |
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powerful, love the "lunatic tic tic," nice touch...7
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| Re: The primates fate (chrystal ball foot switch) by Bachus |
26-Dec-02/3:51 PM |
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| Re: joyriding by Bill Z Bub |
27-Dec-02/3:36 PM |
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| Re: Deep Inner Pain by razorgrin |
27-Dec-02/3:45 PM |
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haha i love this. i sliced a chunk off my thumb with a cheese grater once. evil things, those metal contraptions...9
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| Re: On a chill morning by razorgrin |
27-Dec-02/3:49 PM |
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| Re: Friends Beyond the Storm by loneshadow29 |
27-Dec-02/4:07 PM |
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27-Dec-02/4:08 PM |
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i love those last two lines...wonderful ending...8
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Dec-02/4:10 PM |
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oh this is lovely...it feels like a beautiful secret youve divulged to the world...love "side to side i raise insanity"...9
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| Re: A Short Letter by Ranger |
27-Dec-02/4:11 PM |
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'for at night these words seem so much coarser'...totally true...9
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| Re: Why Did God Do This To Me? by TripleHGurl |
27-Dec-02/4:12 PM |
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seems too short...you're reading and then its like "wait...where did the rest of the poem go?"...5
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27-Dec-02/4:13 PM |
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that is so beautiful...definitely a ten
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| Re: Russian Roulette by <~> |
27-Dec-02/7:12 PM |
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this is AMAZING....i mean its so....amazing...i love that last stanza...ten all the way
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| Re: drum circle by <~> |
27-Dec-02/7:17 PM |
lovely..."cacophony then conceded, condensed, and coalesced
conjoined, as one voice made of many:
warp and weft, naive and deft,
high and low, fast and slow,
on it pulsed, out it flowed" <- great description....8
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| Re: Coloured waifs home by horus8 |
27-Dec-02/7:21 PM |
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| Re: Lasting Forever by angel_uy |
27-Dec-02/7:39 PM |
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sweet but short...perhaps a little too...6
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| Re: Surpass the Dream by darkhelmet10 |
27-Dec-02/7:40 PM |
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sweet but sappy...not my fave..but thats just my opinion...3
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