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Blinded by Your Kiss (Lyric) by ThoughtfulSoul With everyday passing by,
You always cross my mind
I have been without you for so long,
I've lost all track of time
The echoes of your breaking heart,
it haunts my dreams
I can't see a damn thing and I know
exactly what it means
I'm blinded by your kiss
I cannot take this
I can't see what you truly mean to me
Up the ladder:
Crossspecies Blues
Down the ladder:
Dark Lady
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Posted: August 12, 2002 8:50 PM PDT; Last modified: August 12, 2002 8:50 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.111111 Overall Rank: 6015 Comments:
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Redfin @ 66.168.139.251
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12-Aug-02/9:41 PM
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All I can say is "RUN"
I don't really see this as a lyrical poem but maybe I just missed the rhythm. Other than that I found it a nice poem.
yep...that hit a spot...there it goes...alright...i liked it.
I know the feeling exactly. I wish you'd gone for a more regular rhyme scheme or something to tie it all together, but I get the message loud and clear.
i like the idea, and i liked how you worded it...but it needs more...the stanzas seem too short to really pack a punch
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