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Blinded by Your Kiss (Lyric) by ThoughtfulSoul

With everyday passing by, You always cross my mind I have been without you for so long, I've lost all track of time The echoes of your breaking heart, it haunts my dreams I can't see a damn thing and I know exactly what it means I'm blinded by your kiss I cannot take this I can't see what you truly mean to me

rockinindividual 26-Dec-02/3:32 PM
i like the idea, and i liked how you worded it...but it needs more...the stanzas seem too short to really pack a punch




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