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Deep Inner Pain

Member since 2002 · Posted 5 Dec 2002 · 12 comments

Blood is running down my arm as tears mirror the path down my cheeks. Crimson pools form in the cookie batter as I look down at the box of plastic wrap, which is sitting innocently on the counter. My eyes narrow as I see the printing, a blasphemy against all that is true and good. I raise my voice as only those truly wronged can do: " 'New! Safety Cutting Blade', my ass!" I cry as I throw the Saran wrap box across the room. An arc of my blood spattering the floor. The cookies may be a while longer

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[8] horus8 5-Dec-02/9:03 PM Reply
tomorrows headline.."man hijacks plane with saran wrap"!? he could use it as rope and a weapon..tie them up, then let them pick either smothering or bleeding to death..weird wild stuff. sorry about your arm and your cookies. 8.o
[8] deleted user 6-Dec-02/1:03 AM Reply
Well they'll put blood in anything nowadays(you thought that was ketchup last night?), so don't feel too bad about those cookies.
[9] Caducus 6-Dec-02/6:39 AM Reply
Cut the cookies with your wit razorgrin, this satisfied my bloodthirst and cookiehunger -9-
[n/a] razorgrin › Caducus 8-Dec-02/2:09 PM Reply
thanks, all. the cookies were served anyway, not that anyone minded. That was like two years ago and I still have the scar. it looks like i slashed my wrist with a cheesegrater, but fainter.
[10] limonade › razorgrin 8-Dec-02/7:26 PM Reply
SPITEFUL DEATH, I TELLS YA! SPITEFUL DEATH!
Damn you for bleeding all over my kitchen.
Those were good cookies, though...
[n/a] razorgrin › limonade 9-Dec-02/12:09 PM Reply
you were laughing while it was going on just as much as i was.
[9] blackball 16-Dec-02/10:09 AM Reply
greatness. i had that happen to friend before. good stuff. a nine
[n/a] razorgrin › blackball 17-Dec-02/9:45 AM Reply
I dig praise.I think i know who you're talking about...
[8] ecargo 26-Dec-02/5:37 PM Reply
Hee--yum! Juicy.

I want more night-gaunts.
[9] rockinindividual 27-Dec-02/3:45 PM Reply
haha i love this. i sliced a chunk off my thumb with a cheese grater once. evil things, those metal contraptions...9
[0] sk8boardandpoems 25-Feb-03/3:48 PM Reply
We all ave our week points in life i cant spell and razorgrin obviously cant write either!
[n/a] razorgrin › sk8boardandpoems 26-Feb-03/6:59 AM Reply
Hey, fatty. You also can't fuck well either, at least so your mom attested as I climbed off her.