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In Loving Memory of Myself (Free verse) by Owner of the Sky
The dirt piled on one side, While the hole got deeper. They came to bury you today, All starched, pressed, and perfect. They stand in a perfect circle, As if they had rehearsed for this moment, Or have just gone to one too many. You can hear the wind moaning In tune to the dirge just for you. And while the leaves are dancing, They fall on the lid On your black-lacquered home, In exhaustion. No more living Just for Friday to come, Paying your bills, And shaving your legs. No nursing of broken hearts, Birthday cakes, Disaster dates Nor orgasms faked. You were Good. Kind. Perfect daughter, Model wife, Loving and smart. Everyone claims you were The bestfriend they ever had. Will you be missed? I guess you can Hold your breath On that thought Forever.

Up the ladder: Gods Lonely Man
Down the ladder: wax

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.285714
Weighted score: 4.807899
Overall Rank: 11028
Posted: October 25, 2002 5:24 AM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2002 5:24 AM PDT
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Comments:
[6] rockinindividual @ 165.247.93.195 | 26-Dec-02/3:42 PM | Reply
haha i like the ending...its wonderful...6
[8] glittalogik @ 202.95.92.167 | 28-Dec-02/12:04 AM | Reply
nice, just skirting the edges of angsty-suicide-note stereotype without falling in =)
[8] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 7-Jul-03/11:26 PM | Reply
A vibrator and a Von treirs movie might have saved your life.
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