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joyriding (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
Nobody takes you anywhere. You take them. for a ride in unknown hard climes (sarcasm aside) dragging confidence on the backroads, unpaved and windswept. Your skeptical smile once brought down religion in mornings first classes fomenting rebellion behind bulletproof glasses.

Up the ladder: And uncle sam says...

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 6.1666665
Overall Rank: 1015
Posted: December 18, 2002 8:40 PM PST; Last modified: January 5, 2003 6:01 PM PST
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[10] deleted user @ 212.219.142.161 | 19-Dec-02/2:27 AM | Reply
Hmm, 'tis very good & seems to be said from experience?? I like this also cos my name's in the title!!
[0] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Dec-02/2:34 AM | Reply
C'est Parfait
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.210.212 | 19-Dec-02/3:12 AM | Reply
'Your skeptical chin
once brought down religion
in morning's first class
fomenting rebellion
behind bullet-proof glass.'

[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > god'swife | 19-Dec-02/6:36 AM | Reply
i think he meant glasses--the geek look--or at least the intelligenzia--and it makes a nice veer from the expected, don't you think?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > <~> | 19-Dec-02/8:58 AM | Reply
yap, that is what I meant, but the other way does sound a little more sturdy.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/10:33 AM | Reply
fomented? formented. and you guys call me paranoid. tsk.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > horus8 | 19-Dec-02/7:14 PM | Reply
no, fomented is the right word.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/8:31 PM | Reply
you're right. a nice one two. thanks for teaching it to me.???
[9] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.225.254 | 19-Dec-02/7:04 PM | Reply
Hot for teacher? Definitely a thinker.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/8:35 PM | Reply
i'll drink some skaldic brew to that.the titles kind of pauly shore, but the piece is impeccable..
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 19-Dec-02/8:39 PM | Reply
You're too kind. I want to give it a new title, but this is my highest ranked piece yet, and I don't want to erase the votes. I need the ego boost.
Perhaps later.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/8:46 PM | Reply
In fact, I just realized,
I made the top 15! Number 11 right now.
Holy mother of pearl!
KwanYin have mercy on this insignificant worm.

I am shocked. Truly shocked.
Just waiting for the inevitable backlash votes...
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/9:00 PM | Reply
WTF was that?
Its kinda like winning an Oscar, innit?
ie totally meaningless, and somewhat random.
I will revise this one later.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/9:10 PM | Reply
...and its gone. ephemeral, intransient, and impermanent. like love and life and the cherry blossoms. and a cold steam whistle on a sunday afternoon.
[10] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.227 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/9:18 PM | Reply
What are you talking about?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > poetandknowit | 19-Dec-02/9:31 PM | Reply
I was commenting on the fact that this poem appeared in the top 15 for about an hour before someone gave it a zero out of spite.
thats all.
I'm going to rewrite it anyway.
[10] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.227 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/9:36 PM | Reply
No out of spite, just showing the nature of the beast. When Settle logs in he will give all the poems in the top 15 0s, not out of spite, but to get Dark Angel's poems to fill both the best and worst lists. It is his ultimate tribute to nonsense. I originally gave this a 5. But now, you are number 3 on the billboard charts.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > poetandknowit | 19-Dec-02/9:43 PM | Reply
Ha. Thanks, man. And for another brief second, I'm swingin' at the top.
...
So thats why Dark Angel is all over those lists. Hm.

[8] brazen @ 65.237.114.141 > poetandknowit | 22-Dec-02/10:53 PM | Reply
with this being said, my theory of this site being one extremely large disfunctional family has been proven true. now, i shall truely sleep in peace...when i find my bed.
[10] Ranger @ 212.67.98.90 | 22-Dec-02/5:04 AM | Reply
This is good, very good. 10
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Ranger | 22-Dec-02/5:03 PM | Reply
Hell, I think you just pushed me to the #1 spot. I feel like I should open some champaigne.
...
And yet I'm not satisfied with this one at all. I need to completely rewrite the second stanza.
[10] Ranger @ 212.67.99.90 > Bill Z Bub | 23-Dec-02/12:20 PM | Reply
Yes indeed you did get to number one...that was yesterday, this is today...and some gay twat has already brought you down from 7.44 to 6.7 something...with a ridiculously (unjustified) low vote
Why not redo the poem but leave this version on...I think it's a brilliant piece, and I'm sure most people agree...in my opinion this deserves a place in the top five whatever the critics say...wonderful stuff
[8] brazen @ 65.237.114.141 | 22-Dec-02/10:57 PM | Reply
last 6 lines...been there, done that. that is also the precise reason they are my favorite ending lines EVER...except for the end of fight club.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > brazen | 15-Jan-03/7:17 PM | Reply
Unfortunately I had to cut the ending off. But Fight Club is the beast! Great fuckin' movie.
[10] rockinindividual @ 66.171.38.29 | 27-Dec-02/3:36 PM | Reply
lovely words...10
[5] Limness @ 67.84.171.238 | 1-Jan-03/10:59 PM | Reply
this has good ideas, but seems very unfinished
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Jan-03/7:14 PM | Reply
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[10] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Jan-03/7:15 PM | Reply
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[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Bachus | 5-Jan-03/7:25 PM | Reply
yer a good man, laddie. cheers, I'd buy ye a Guinness if I could.
[10] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 > Bill Z Bub | 6-Jan-03/2:39 AM | Reply
Yar, and oim a leprechaun
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Ranger | 8-Jan-03/6:01 AM | Reply
Or a pirate.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Bill Z Bub | 15-Jan-03/7:14 PM | Reply
I hereby declare 2003 to be the Year of the Pirate!

AAAarR, me mateys! Avast! Swab the poop deck! And something about Prawnes and Nudidity?
[8] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 > Bill Z Bub | 15-Jan-03/10:11 PM | Reply
have you been carousing with tint?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.9 > <~> | 15-Jul-03/5:18 PM | Reply
Who is tint?
[8] <~> @ 64.252.187.184 > Bill Z Bub | 15-Jul-03/8:49 PM | Reply
tintagiles. he's lyrical, like that.

i dunno, it just made me think of him.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Jan-03/7:17 PM | Reply
3, i have to go work now. thanks for earlier.
[9] joydoll @ 195.93.33.11 | 20-May-03/3:43 AM | Reply
this poem made me want to read your other stuff... i like it....i like it a lot... how convenient that my name also appears in the title! this is my fave of all that i have read so far on the site.... as far as editing it... keep this version in a box somewhere as a reminder of how you made me smile! :)
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