poemranker ::joyriding by Bill Z Bub

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Free verse № 30921

joyriding

by Bill Z Bub

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Dec 2002 · Edited 5 Jan 2003 · 37 comments

Nobody takes you anywhere. You take them. for a ride in unknown hard climes (sarcasm aside) dragging confidence on the backroads, unpaved and windswept. Your skeptical smile once brought down religion in mornings first classes fomenting rebellion behind bulletproof glasses.

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37 comments

[10] deleted user 19-Dec-02/2:27 AM Reply
Hmm, 'tis very good & seems to be said from experience?? I like this also cos my name's in the title!!
[0] Caducus 19-Dec-02/2:34 AM Reply
C'est Parfait
[n/a] god'swife 19-Dec-02/3:12 AM Reply
'Your skeptical chin
once brought down religion
in morning's first class
fomenting rebellion
behind bullet-proof glass.'

[8] <~> › god'swife 19-Dec-02/6:36 AM Reply
i think he meant glasses--the geek look--or at least the intelligenzia--and it makes a nice veer from the expected, don't you think?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › <~> 19-Dec-02/8:58 AM Reply
yap, that is what I meant, but the other way does sound a little more sturdy.
[10] horus8 19-Dec-02/10:33 AM Reply
fomented? formented. and you guys call me paranoid. tsk.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › horus8 19-Dec-02/7:14 PM Reply
no, fomented is the right word.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/8:31 PM Reply
you're right. a nice one two. thanks for teaching it to me.???
[9] INTRANSIT 19-Dec-02/7:04 PM Reply
Hot for teacher? Definitely a thinker.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 19-Dec-02/8:35 PM Reply
i'll drink some skaldic brew to that.the titles kind of pauly shore, but the piece is impeccable..
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › <{Baba^Yaga}> 19-Dec-02/8:39 PM Reply
You're too kind. I want to give it a new title, but this is my highest ranked piece yet, and I don't want to erase the votes. I need the ego boost.
Perhaps later.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/8:46 PM Reply
In fact, I just realized,
I made the top 15! Number 11 right now.
Holy mother of pearl!
KwanYin have mercy on this insignificant worm.

I am shocked. Truly shocked.
Just waiting for the inevitable backlash votes...
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/9:00 PM Reply
WTF was that?
Its kinda like winning an Oscar, innit?
ie totally meaningless, and somewhat random.
I will revise this one later.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/9:10 PM Reply
...and its gone. ephemeral, intransient, and impermanent. like love and life and the cherry blossoms. and a cold steam whistle on a sunday afternoon.
[10] poetandknowit › Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/9:18 PM Reply
What are you talking about?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › poetandknowit 19-Dec-02/9:31 PM Reply
I was commenting on the fact that this poem appeared in the top 15 for about an hour before someone gave it a zero out of spite.
thats all.
I'm going to rewrite it anyway.
[10] poetandknowit › Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/9:36 PM Reply
No out of spite, just showing the nature of the beast. When Settle logs in he will give all the poems in the top 15 0s, not out of spite, but to get Dark Angel's poems to fill both the best and worst lists. It is his ultimate tribute to nonsense. I originally gave this a 5. But now, you are number 3 on the billboard charts.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › poetandknowit 19-Dec-02/9:43 PM Reply
Ha. Thanks, man. And for another brief second, I'm swingin' at the top.
...
So thats why Dark Angel is all over those lists. Hm.

[8] brazen › poetandknowit 22-Dec-02/10:53 PM Reply
with this being said, my theory of this site being one extremely large disfunctional family has been proven true. now, i shall truely sleep in peace...when i find my bed.
[10] Ranger 22-Dec-02/5:04 AM Reply
This is good, very good. 10
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Ranger 22-Dec-02/5:03 PM Reply
Hell, I think you just pushed me to the #1 spot. I feel like I should open some champaigne.
...
And yet I'm not satisfied with this one at all. I need to completely rewrite the second stanza.
[10] Ranger › Bill Z Bub 23-Dec-02/12:20 PM Reply
Yes indeed you did get to number one...that was yesterday, this is today...and some gay twat has already brought you down from 7.44 to 6.7 something...with a ridiculously (unjustified) low vote
Why not redo the poem but leave this version on...I think it's a brilliant piece, and I'm sure most people agree...in my opinion this deserves a place in the top five whatever the critics say...wonderful stuff
[8] brazen 22-Dec-02/10:57 PM Reply
last 6 lines...been there, done that. that is also the precise reason they are my favorite ending lines EVER...except for the end of fight club.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › brazen 15-Jan-03/7:17 PM Reply
Unfortunately I had to cut the ending off. But Fight Club is the beast! Great fuckin' movie.
[10] rockinindividual 27-Dec-02/3:36 PM Reply
lovely words...10
[5] Limness 1-Jan-03/10:59 PM Reply
this has good ideas, but seems very unfinished
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 5-Jan-03/7:14 PM Reply
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[10] Bachus 5-Jan-03/7:15 PM Reply
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[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Bachus 5-Jan-03/7:25 PM Reply
yer a good man, laddie. cheers, I'd buy ye a Guinness if I could.
[10] Ranger › Bill Z Bub 6-Jan-03/2:39 AM Reply
Yar, and oim a leprechaun
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Ranger 8-Jan-03/6:01 AM Reply
Or a pirate.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 15-Jan-03/7:14 PM Reply
I hereby declare 2003 to be the Year of the Pirate!

AAAarR, me mateys! Avast! Swab the poop deck! And something about Prawnes and Nudidity?
[8] <~> › Bill Z Bub 15-Jan-03/10:11 PM Reply
have you been carousing with tint?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › <~> 15-Jul-03/5:18 PM Reply
Who is tint?
[8] <~> › Bill Z Bub 15-Jul-03/8:49 PM Reply
tintagiles. he's lyrical, like that.

i dunno, it just made me think of him.
[10] horus8 5-Jan-03/7:17 PM Reply
3, i have to go work now. thanks for earlier.
[9] joydoll 20-May-03/3:43 AM Reply
this poem made me want to read your other stuff... i like it....i like it a lot... how convenient that my name also appears in the title! this is my fave of all that i have read so far on the site.... as far as editing it... keep this version in a box somewhere as a reminder of how you made me smile! :)