Re: Moving by kingit	2-Dec-03/6:06 AM
Not bad this, the best I have seen of yours. To fit all of your poems into this one eccentric style is a mistake, form should not be arbitrary. For once the form works here I think, the slowness, and also the short length so it doesn't hurt the eyes too much.
Re: Leap! by Jill Stockinger	1-Dec-03/2:11 PM
Reads well, each line a small packaged thought. I must continue leaping is a fairly weak end though. Not sure if I would call it concrete either
Re: For Brianna by MaliqaTara	1-Dec-03/12:00 PM
It is oddly strange. The realisation (only about half way through for me) that the other person looking after your baby was god (whichever). Gave this a kind of playful theme out of context. Good though
Re: a comment on "I post here cause I have a lot of readers" by Bachus	28-Nov-03/12:17 PM
careful, you might be making yourself look a little silly.
Re: Poets who are virgins? listen to Mr. Haiku. by Don-Quixote	28-Nov-03/5:00 AM
First ones the best, and a nature theme, I mean what could be more natural?
Re: Mr Zero? Your a coward. by DreamerSupreme	27-Nov-03/8:42 AM
same here (strangely at 3.30 every day)
Re: Don't fuck with Mr. Haiku by SupremeDreamer	27-Nov-03/8:36 AM
More a senryu (a haiku has a nature theme). Giving this a nature theme would be impressive. Good though, the soft feel of the words and then bang.
Re: Islands Of Our King by Caducus	24-Nov-03/1:55 PM
Like the bit about the islands, kind of makes me think about politicians in northern ireland. Funerals for political murders,usual suspects, turning up, blaming eachother, not breaking the cycle. Possibly needs to be a bit more clear how islands move together works as a metaphor, or is it figurative for the leaders?
Re: I have thirteen knives, and a sore riddled Black pussy by horus8	23-Nov-03/9:53 AM
Amusing wordplay, especially checked under his kilt for a pulse.
Re: The fight by INTRANSIT	23-Nov-03/9:50 AM
like the rhyme savoir faire and chairs. and how the end stops dead
Re: sumerian translation by vermeer33	23-Nov-03/9:48 AM
Like the unusual phrasing of lines 3,4.
Re: a comment on Lesson in Wickedness by eyrbare	21-Nov-03/3:00 PM
The question was for eyrbare, but I would have thought getting up to z on this delightful puzzle would be extremely difficult!
Re: Lesson in Wickedness by eyrbare	21-Nov-03/8:32 AM
like it, can you get up to Z???
Re: a comment on Driftwood by malakin	21-Nov-03/12:14 AM
I read a poem the other day, about some guys sailing in a boat. Apparently one in a fit of excitement cut off his bum! As a result the boat became marooned and the sailors died a slow death of starvation. That is all except for the one that chopped off his bum. He was made to spend eternity repeating his tired old comments and single joke. Any ideas DA?
Re: Truth by eyrbare	17-Nov-03/3:46 PM
The leaf is not violet to start with. Not being violet it is hidden (but how does heat hide). Comes to colour in autumn. We see it. This I think is the only way it makes sense but it is not the obvious interpretation. Also it is a million miles from my own understanding of truth. Other than that............ not bad.
Re: Anonymous Voters Of Zeros by scitz	17-Nov-03/12:13 PM
'Your left and right hand are your wives,' no more explanation needed.
Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass	16-Nov-03/4:47 AM
Sylvia Plaths 'daddy' translated into chinese and now back.
Re: My daddy taught me about being a good sport by horus8	16-Nov-03/4:45 AM
"He has a learning disability called. Nepotism.' is brilliant!!!!!
Re: Ranker Nazis by DreamerSupreme	16-Nov-03/4:44 AM
Spot on, and has always been the way
Re: Zinnias are a funny flower by Bachus	16-Nov-03/4:43 AM
like it was written in my soul