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Moving (Free verse) by kingit Lonely moments flow by & empty into rivers -my
demise. The Flea, too quick for me leaps! from my
leg licks his lips & smiles- rapids roar in his
belly & somewhere I Live
Up the ladder:
Las Vegas
Down the ladder:
The Little Merman
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Posted: December 1, 2003 8:57 PM PST; Last modified: December 1, 2003 8:57 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.1430435 Overall Rank: 5400 Comments:
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kingit @ 67.69.63.83
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1-Dec-03/10:23 PM
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Mind-bending shit!....I've just discovered you! Is there an echo in here?
Not bad this, the best I have seen of yours. To fit all of your poems into this one eccentric style is a mistake, form should not be arbitrary.
For once the form works here I think, the slowness, and also the short length so it doesn't hurt the eyes too much.
Christ.
Christ?- no.- just a representative, doing his shit-work for him.
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