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Moving (Free verse) by kingit

Lonely moments flow by & empty into rivers -my demise. The Flea, too quick for me leaps! from my leg licks his lips & smiles- rapids roar in his belly & somewhere I Live

richa 2-Dec-03/6:06 AM
Not bad this, the best I have seen of yours. To fit all of your poems into this one eccentric style is a mistake, form should not be arbitrary.

For once the form works here I think, the slowness, and also the short length so it doesn't hurt the eyes too much.




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