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Free verse № 76174

The fight

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Nov 2003 · Edited 2 Sep 2005 · 8 comments

Working in the office sending out bills she reached into my shorts which tested my will. When I reached up deep into her shirt the war got bigger as well as quite curt. Twirling and spinning into the hall when suddenly we stopped; we'd damaged a wall. We hurled each other to the floor with a thump! Imagine my suprise when I was grabbed by the rump! Tumbling and rolling to the top of the stair, about to go down I grabbed for her hair. And over we went to the bottom most mat. Ending with roughly a giggle-gasp-splat. We rested a spell, then continued our itching we cleared all the counters around the huge kitchen. We busted our table and broke a few chairs. Our rumle was minus all savoir-faire. We knocked over lamps broke glass on the floor, then I took her outside until the moon hollered no more.

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8 comments

[4] smlink84 22-Nov-03/9:46 PM Reply
Creative, destructive...sad.
[9] AuntyM 23-Nov-03/7:02 AM Reply
Not exactly romantic. Great visual. I like it!!!!
[7] richa 23-Nov-03/9:50 AM Reply
like the rhyme savoir faire and chairs.

and how the end stops dead
[7] wilco 2-Sep-05/9:01 PM Reply
naughty...I'd change huge kitchen to large kitchen for better flow.
[7] Dovina 3-Sep-05/6:55 AM Reply
Very naughty! Go straight to your room!
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 3-Sep-05/6:56 AM Reply
not naughty enough judging by the scores. ha!
[7] Dovina › INTRANSIT 3-Sep-05/7:02 AM Reply
If it's a naughtiness scale, you get 10.
[9] Bethy 3-Sep-05/3:53 PM Reply
giggle-gasp-splat!!! I love this line...this poem made me roar with...gasp! laughter...:) Bethy