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The fight (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
Working in the office sending out bills she reached into my shorts which tested my will. When I reached up deep into her shirt the war got bigger as well as quite curt. Twirling and spinning into the hall when suddenly we stopped; we'd damaged a wall. We hurled each other to the floor with a thump! Imagine my suprise when I was grabbed by the rump! Tumbling and rolling to the top of the stair, about to go down I grabbed for her hair. And over we went to the bottom most mat. Ending with roughly a giggle-gasp-splat. We rested a spell, then continued our itching we cleared all the counters around the huge kitchen. We busted our table and broke a few chairs. Our rumle was minus all savoir-faire. We knocked over lamps broke glass on the floor, then I took her outside until the moon hollered no more.

Up the ladder: Windflower
Down the ladder: Christmas Break

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.4
Weighted score: 5.166884
Overall Rank: 5013
Posted: November 21, 2003 2:38 PM PST; Last modified: September 2, 2005 7:02 PM PDT
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Comments:
[4] smlink84 @ 68.98.150.99 | 22-Nov-03/9:46 PM | Reply
Creative, destructive...sad.
[9] AuntyM @ 205.188.208.105 | 23-Nov-03/7:02 AM | Reply
Not exactly romantic. Great visual. I like it!!!!
[7] richa @ 81.178.247.215 | 23-Nov-03/9:50 AM | Reply
like the rhyme savoir faire and chairs.

and how the end stops dead
[7] wilco @ 66.61.101.130 | 2-Sep-05/9:01 PM | Reply
naughty...I'd change huge kitchen to large kitchen for better flow.
[7] Dovina @ 12.96.171.27 | 3-Sep-05/6:55 AM | Reply
Very naughty! Go straight to your room!
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.100.138 > Dovina | 3-Sep-05/6:56 AM | Reply
not naughty enough judging by the scores. ha!
[7] Dovina @ 12.96.171.27 > INTRANSIT | 3-Sep-05/7:02 AM | Reply
If it's a naughtiness scale, you get 10.
[9] Bethy @ 24.222.32.196 | 3-Sep-05/3:53 PM | Reply
giggle-gasp-splat!!! I love this line...this poem made me roar with...gasp! laughter...:) Bethy
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