on Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina
14 Sep 2006, 10:21 PM
Nice. I read this yesterday, unfortunately having spent the day shifting vegetables so the mental image of tender, brave sprouts was hilarious. Now I'm a bit more with it, I can appreciate it.
on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy
14 Sep 2006, 10:18 PM
Really, this poem is an explanation of the origin of the phrase 'fucking hell'.
replying on weather poem part 8: stating the obvious by nypoet22
14 Sep 2006, 10:08 PM
Aah, you two are so cute sometimes...
I don't see the problem with line two - the thermostat does rise of its own accord when set to, and he doesn't say 'sweats out their pores *directly because* the thermostat rises'. Thermostat goes up, temperature goes up, people get hot, people sweat. As for it being a sentence in its own right, again that's not a problem. In this context it's not a standalone sentence - starting with 'Sweats' in this case means it refers back to the previous sentence for the subject (everybody). Splitting the whole phrase into two seperate sentences removes the need for the conjuncion [and] as well as for punctuation.
I don't see the problem with line two - the thermostat does rise of its own accord when set to, and he doesn't say 'sweats out their pores *directly because* the thermostat rises'. Thermostat goes up, temperature goes up, people get hot, people sweat. As for it being a sentence in its own right, again that's not a problem. In this context it's not a standalone sentence - starting with 'Sweats' in this case means it refers back to the previous sentence for the subject (everybody). Splitting the whole phrase into two seperate sentences removes the need for the conjuncion [and] as well as for punctuation.
on The Ice Soldier by MacFrantic
13 Sep 2006, 10:17 PM
Good grief, Mac - I looked up to see a gathering of 5 users online...4 of which are you! New record, methinks. How's Colorado?
on Be Not Afraid Of Dying. by Mr Pig
13 Sep 2006, 10:15 PM
Sweet, traditional English meets traditional Japanese. Blessed.
on Dear Maggie by Stephen Robins
13 Sep 2006, 10:11 PM
Last line's pretty funny
"there's chaste to be chased 'neath the myrtle 'til dawn" -- http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
This reminds me of something, and I can't for the life of me think what...
This reminds me of something, and I can't for the life of me think what...
on Fill Out That Paper by Wakeboarder20
12 Sep 2006, 9:53 PM
Heh, amusing.
on a limerick from kent by nentwined
12 Sep 2006, 12:10 AM
Uh-oh...
on When I Were a Duck by colbaby
12 Sep 2006, 12:09 AM
Brilliance -9-
on I Have a Brain That Glows In the Dark by colbaby
12 Sep 2006, 12:09 AM
I think Steve Irwin's untimely demise might have unhinged you. Fucking funny poems though :-D
on Flood Land, East Kentucky by zodiac
11 Sep 2006, 9:49 AM
This demands several reads, awesome lines and a compelling story. I suck at accents and dialects, so I'll have to assume you've got it right, but that's not a difficult assumption to justify.
on Wet dreams by ecargo
11 Sep 2006, 9:38 AM
I found 'mother bulk' incredibly difficult to reconcile with the title...could just be me, I guess. Also, 'spray of sun' was difficult - although it's a lovely phrase - because of the earlier links with night (again, could just be me, I'm tired so bear with me ;-) ). The description is super and I do like the rhymes :-)
on The Clock and the Storm by cleverdevice
11 Sep 2006, 9:23 AM
Excellent spelling! Have you gone back to Durham yet?
on Final Goregasm by creepshow
11 Sep 2006, 9:21 AM
Are you a Jack the Ripper fan?
on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta
10 Sep 2006, 1:17 PM
Sweet, but it could do with something other than 'amazing grace'. Other than that, nice :-)
on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian
10 Sep 2006, 1:00 PM
Curse of the typos strikes - 'raspberry'. Love the last line, although as an Englishman I, of course, don't feel fear ;-)
replying on Products of Pacifisim by Nuit
9 Sep 2006, 10:20 PM
You don't mention religious wars, but you seem to be saying that godless pacifism is a blight on the world, which would imply that you think religious activism is a good thing. 'Plastic pacifism' = bad. Evolution and logic (from 'warped pride') = bad. So presumably the oppoosite of those, religious activism, equals good.
What do i take from '10000 years of spiritual philosophy'? Well I don't think you've read much Western philosophy. Ten thousand years? Even the semitic philosophy only goes back, what, six thousand? And I don't know if that can be classed as Western. Not in origin, anyway.
Ultimately, with your above comment, this seems to be you saying that ideology is empty and soulless because it encourages inactivity. Correct me if I'm wrong, but you don't need to tell me how much of a gargantuan dunce I am. I already know.
What do i take from '10000 years of spiritual philosophy'? Well I don't think you've read much Western philosophy. Ten thousand years? Even the semitic philosophy only goes back, what, six thousand? And I don't know if that can be classed as Western. Not in origin, anyway.
Ultimately, with your above comment, this seems to be you saying that ideology is empty and soulless because it encourages inactivity. Correct me if I'm wrong, but you don't need to tell me how much of a gargantuan dunce I am. I already know.