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The Clock and the Storm (Free verse) by cleverdevice
The weather is at war
And crouches, brooding, on the hill-top
Before beginning its relentless march
Towards the house.
I stand at the window
And watch motionless, the only sound
The resolute ticking of the grandfather clock
Steadfast in near silence
My only companion
In the impending struggle soon to break
Against the walls of this ancient house
Centuries old.
Daring to speak
The house groans at the memories of past battles
As trees in the field are brushed aside
And cowed.
In screams of anger
Rain hurls itself at the windows
And the wind scratches at the door
Desperate to break in
And scared, I step back,
And turn. Stopping. Confronted by the clock,
The aged custodian of this home
Who will never flee.
Older than the house
He has seen the storms before
Yet continues his defiant stare
And the winds is hushed
As the rain ceases.
The storm, recognising its old adversary
In deferance and respect
Retreats.
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Posted: March 23, 2004 3:43 AM PST; Last modified: September 11, 2006 2:39 AM PDT
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Daring to speak, the house groans
Memories of past battles
The trees in the field, brushed aside
Cowed by screams of anger...
...or retain the stanzas but make it rhyme, Kipling-style. Then it would be superb, because you've got the content almost spot on. Just a few less words in places, not that I'm in a position to complain about people being wordy ;-)