on On coming across a field of deer one afternoon by <~>
27 Feb 2003, 2:07 AM
robert k frost connotations too
on On coming across a field of deer one afternoon by <~>
27 Feb 2003, 2:07 AM
Beauty as ever my dear friend.
on Crucifixion by Mr Pig
23 Feb 2003, 3:50 AM
Loved the trilogy pig dude
on wandering, north by <~>
20 Feb 2003, 5:05 AM
This is so thoughtful in both respects. Thank you I will cherish it dearly. I loved this :
And I am alone
And I am without
I am within
My own fertile doubts
Fighting these feelings
Fighting my pride
Fighting the faith
That I let slide
-----you turned my blood warm all over.......xxxx cad
And I am alone
And I am without
I am within
My own fertile doubts
Fighting these feelings
Fighting my pride
Fighting the faith
That I let slide
-----you turned my blood warm all over.......xxxx cad
on The lyric of the cabbage by Dostoyevsky
19 Feb 2003, 9:47 AM
I couldn't have written this love poem for a cabbage, well done I bet you were knackered after. Its not something i can offer contructive criticism on (as you begged for in the suggestions page) as its non serious. However you found originality with this so.....8
By the way you have had more comments from people from what you have commented on
By the way you have had more comments from people from what you have commented on
on Perversions 6: Judgement Day by razorgrin
19 Feb 2003, 6:36 AM
Very good
on To Laugh Or Cry by casey
18 Feb 2003, 12:56 AM
I think you could have told this better avoiding the cliches, you've written a lot without saying much, try and evoke more depth to your work. -4-
on For my wife by INTRANSIT
18 Feb 2003, 12:52 AM
Silverstem hit it, it is dreamy and enchanted, so glad you used saturn and not Uranus - beautifully done -9-
on Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig
16 Feb 2003, 4:06 AM
awesome, I got no beef sorry pork with this at all. 10
on Unmasking Wyverns by horus8
16 Feb 2003, 3:11 AM
A Vilanelle in the top 15, the only one congrats amigo. Loved the last stanza in particular dance with this fat lady.......8
on Xmas gifts list by lunar
14 Feb 2003, 8:34 AM
This is a great piece of writing though it could be argued that its not conformist to poetry, thats why I like it, and the message here. Listen, ignore poetandknowitall he loves to criticize and hates to praise, some us are trying to drag poetry into to the 21st century he's in tights and pants reading anglo saxon poetry, fuck it, keep your individuality, ---9
on The Cheetah (dedicated to zzinnia) by Mr Pig
13 Feb 2003, 10:57 AM
Heres a 9 its pretty good yo, but tell me, did you eat all the pies? is that why your a spit roaster?
on The Cheetah (dedicated to zzinnia) by Mr Pig
13 Feb 2003, 8:58 AM
Show your nobility Mr Pig you are stressing ZZinnia out, tell her who you are, she is not your pink little muppet, why the dedication?
on The Boys and Girls Club of London by OneFingerAnswer
13 Feb 2003, 6:12 AM
A lot to take in here looks promising on a glance will peruse later
on staring by moonlight_sky
13 Feb 2003, 6:11 AM
A good subject which you could have written about better, it would be interesting to read it from the POV of the starer, black gloves, menacem so much more to touch on. This is a bit too obvious try delving deeper(5)
on Just Your Average 'Death' Poem by Owner of the Sky
13 Feb 2003, 6:08 AM
Moving and quite thought provoking, a strong opening and ending, probably the best i've read of yours....8
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
13 Feb 2003, 4:15 AM
Thought it was about time i commented on this. its all been said by the others your a great poet, a fine poem, what i like is how you used the subject an amplified such beauty from it...10
on Mother Earth by DewDrop
11 Feb 2003, 3:53 AM
This is one of your more angry pieces, i have awaoke to smell your nicaraguan coffee beans and the aroma will linger for quite some time. Liked where you were going with this,but leave Zeta Jones out of it ....HELLO ! -9
on Black rose in the moonlight by greatguy
10 Feb 2003, 4:58 AM
Quite Beautiful, you old romantic.
worthy of a 9
worthy of a 9