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On coming across a field of deer one afternoon

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 26 Feb 2003 · Edited 27 Feb 2003 · 12 comments

Snap! Attune and pivot, Eloquence bespeaking muscled escape, A whirling melee of grace, spryly Sprung over tumbled bramble, Leave me humbled, witness to their Flick! Like a tide washing itself uphill Ten times the white, condensed and Tailed in tiny white flames, In ermined retreat, Gone! They crashed when I startled, sighting them. Dun on dun in the decaying golden last glance Of a January, past.

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[8] Caducus 27-Feb-03/2:07 AM Reply
Beauty as ever my dear friend.
[8] Caducus 27-Feb-03/2:07 AM Reply
robert k frost connotations too
[8] spank me baby yeah 27-Feb-03/3:02 AM Reply
I REALLY LIKED THIS
[n/a] Jeremi 27-Feb-03/6:05 AM Reply
Deer don't come in fields. I don't know what the word is, but it isn't field.
[n/a] <~> › Jeremi 27-Feb-03/6:58 AM Reply
i came, not the deer, dear. syntax and you should get to know each other a little better. maybe over a couple of beers. or a rack.
[9] razorgrin 27-Feb-03/11:15 AM Reply
Beautiful.
[9] Ranger 27-Feb-03/2:56 PM Reply
I love most of this but I'm confused by the last line of the 4th stanza. Witness to their what? Or have I missed something. I think I'll come back to this soon. I would also be grateful if you could tell me what you think of my latest efforts.
[9] Bachus 27-Feb-03/3:58 PM Reply
Horns a velvet.
[9] Bachus 27-Feb-03/4:15 PM Reply
I recieved the magazine today. It looks delightful. Thank you so much for everything. You are a true friend Z. and a great writer. I will give you my feedback perhaps later on the phone. Cute pictures. Very interesting blood line. Cheers.
[7] Mr Pig 28-Feb-03/5:08 AM Reply
Delightful my Dear girl, bloody well done.
[9] UnityMitford 28-Feb-03/6:33 AM Reply
as usual, gorgeousness and gorgeosity made flesh.
[8] INTRANSIT 28-Feb-03/4:58 PM Reply
Glad to see you back in the saddle.
Busy and active poem ya got here. Good thing they didnt dash out in front of you.