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Looking Down (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom Christ blood warms my skin till it burns
At times Iâm drowning
Others Iâm dying of thirst
More still its just enough to get by
Sometimes its as close as whispering lips upon my ear
Others its as far away as the voice on the other end of the telephone
More often than not its in sight but never near enough for me to touch
I can barely stand to look at the wound
It burns at my eyes but I close them and stare anyway
Its so hard to believe that an inflammation could be so beautiful
Up the ladder:
On coming across a field of deer one afternoon
Down the ladder:
Vodka, An ex-girlfriend, and a mess
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Posted: April 11, 2003 9:36 PM PDT; Last modified: April 11, 2003 9:36 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.7995286 Overall Rank: 404 Comments:
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lunar @ 195.92.67.71
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12-Apr-03/6:26 AM
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Bit strange! Doesnt completly make sense (to me anyway)
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37
> lunar
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12-Apr-03/7:56 AM
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Well it is a little cryptic but its actually just about staring at the sun.
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223
> thepinkbunnyofdoom
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28-Jun-03/11:23 PM
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This one is about trying to make something simple and mundane sound needlessly complicated, and interesting. Again more growing as a writer.
Hello.Cryptic yet interesting nonetheless.I love your name!LOL Look!it's a little pink bunny!I've never seen one that color before....OMIGAWD!IT'S A BRINGER OF DOOM!
Take care
and you thought the elephants were bad...
Wow it makes a lot more sense now!
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