Re: untitled by angel_uy	17-Apr-03/8:25 AM
This is your best, it shows you have made an effort and tried to engage your imagination and it offers more originality. Write of something that really interests you, go to town on it quality over quantity. here's 7 bunnys. 7
Re: Is It Love by angel_uy	17-Apr-03/8:21 AM
By the way I would say tintagiles is by far the best imagery poet on this site, you wanna listen to the geezer.
Re: Is It Love by angel_uy	17-Apr-03/8:20 AM
This is basic in all aspects, lacking imagination and any interest value for the reader. In your work I have read thus far some of your lines are good, quite dreamlike, but as poems rather forgettable. Dust yourself down and keep bangin them out. 5
Re: Wandering Spirit by angel_uy	17-Apr-03/8:16 AM
Almost dramatic, it reads like a thought process rather than a poem. You need to work on imagery and metaphor to make it stand out and grab the readers balls. 5
Re: Shimmer of Tears by angel_uy	17-Apr-03/8:14 AM
Not sure about lifes breath and loneliness you have spelled wrong other than that its quite a nice mad 5 minutes you had in writing this. 6
Re: A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again)	12-Apr-03/1:02 PM
Some will love it as I do and a few will hate it but who can deny its beautiful? 9
Re: To My Grave by Bonehiss	11-Apr-03/2:23 AM
Very concealed points, please enlighten me more I almost enjoyed it 6
Re: Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig	11-Apr-03/2:21 AM
sorry to hear of your porking problem.
Re: Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig	8-Apr-03/9:43 AM
Looks mostly excellent but I have some Q&A on this be back tomorrow.
Re: a comment on Shelter by poetandknowit	2-Apr-03/7:26 AM
I have contacted Dr A SShole who assures me he can give me 38 stitches on the crack of my srse to prevent this from happening.
Re: a comment on Shelter by poetandknowit	2-Apr-03/5:53 AM
It may look like a group hug but we're strangling each other and its all evens. Razorgrin please dont bother to resuscitate me (unless you've been drinking cheap whiskey) then do please.
Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	2-Apr-03/5:48 AM
I think this should be read to all new pupils at secondary school followed up by lessons on how not to drive whilst contracting the virus.
Re: a comment on Shelter by poetandknowit	2-Apr-03/5:43 AM
PAKI, just reading these comments does it not say something to you? I do like this poem and I'm on record saying it but I think your comments piss people off to extremes. You wont change and neither will I, but we're a pair of fools arguing, it can all be avoided from my part not reacting and your part being a wanker in the way you comment. We both couldn't give a shit about each other at the end of the day but you still read my poems for reasons only you know, I can only read yours once I know you've dropped down from the high horse. So whatdowedo?
Re: Shelter by poetandknowit	2-Apr-03/5:34 AM
To be fair I liked this, the length is just right for what you have conveyed. line 4/5 is said articulately even though its cliched, and I tip my hat to you on this one and vote you a 9. (please carry on being a bastard I quite like it now).
Re: good-bye kansas city: meditation #1 by poetandknowit	2-Apr-03/5:29 AM
Astonishingly poor, this didnt pop my pimple at all.
Re: Worst Haiku Ever by maffy	2-Apr-03/5:21 AM
cack
Re: FIRETRUCK by Garrett S Sexton	2-Apr-03/5:19 AM
Cool Ending
Re: make me smile by Garrett S Sexton	2-Apr-03/5:17 AM
2 things in life are guaranteed : death and a nurse.
Re: a comment on Lossing Grip by Katie2	2-Apr-03/5:15 AM
Not a bad effort but the chorus is so long per line it would be nightmare singing it without dying from lack of breath. My good friend (cough) poetandknowit is very interested in how you, me, and ranger and all us 'pimple poets' write in the style we do. I hope you can help him its a shame he has issues and I'm worried about him like I worry about what aftershave I should wear for work...7 (it needs to be downsized for a lyric). Horus is the lyricmeister you need his comments.
Re: Temptation In Genesis by scitz	1-Apr-03/10:18 AM
Found this hard PAKI. I have done the 5-7-5 thing and I wouldn't exactly say I was looking to say something profound I was just experimenting. The last line referes to the Old Testament which I find interesting because thats when God and Lucifer were both in heaven before our old pal Satan got kicked out for being rather handsome (amongst other things). Lines one and two were just set pieces for the ending, and irony and a possibility. Thanks for the civil tongue, How would you do it please reply?