Oh geez you're so sophisticated and witty. obviously open minded and well educated. you should go to a children's hospital and read that in the pediatric aids ward. I'm sure you would really make they're fucking day if not surely enlighten them.a
Good comment lol!!! Yeah your right I should really get a life! I guess I should think of others more instead of writing immature poetry right? lol see ya round asl?
you are a very sick person my brother died of aids 2 years ago when he had a car crash his blood mixed with another persons u should think more about the poems you write before you post them you dont know how much pain u can cause someone your not even worth any words of violence you should just admit your self to the nearest mental hospital.
The most disappointing thing in the whole world is that yoda'saprentice made no comment about 'AIDS in a car crash' (part of the AIDS bonanza), which I wrote especially for him.
Actually, Ming, I know people who have AIDS. I'll thank you not to speak so lightly of such a serious disease. You are a disgrace to this site, a digrace to the human race, and a disgrace to yourself. But most of all, you are a disgrace...to America. USA! USA!
Sorry I've been away for so long and sorry to see you have nothing more to offer mankind than your sorry poetic manifestoes of self-[bravado].
Go ahead and seek what you [wish] to reap for you will be pushed like a beaver up the stream - dam-ned to succeed.
Your sarchasm is not as [deep] as you may feel.
you are a very sick person my brother died of aids 2 years ago when he had a car crash his blood mixed with another persons u should think more about the poems you write before you post them you dont know how much pain u can cause someone your not even worth any words of violence you should just admit your self to the nearest mental hospital.
You idiots.. don't you understand anything. Its life. Live. Enjoy. Die. anyways..followers or failure. DarkA. I found it invoking, cautiously simulated within the wind of today's time and hour's friend. Cherrio.
da, you really shouldnt let Ms Bog beat you out of the # last position... think of your reputation, you better get to work writting some more crap so people can vote you back down to where you belong!
Your'e a tasteless homophobe, you can't write worth a damn, and you're a right royal arsewipe. I'd stick a positive comment in there somewhere, but I can't seem to find one...
This piece of unauthorised AIDS Bonanza! fanfic is one of the worst limericks I've ever read. The first line is the only good part; after that it fails to rhyme, scan, or make any sense whatsoever. Here is my version:
There once was some AIDS in a crayon,
Which I scribbled all over a Mayan.
They cremated his body,
But the admin was shoddy:
His ashes were sealed in a gay urn!!!!!!
I have no formal education in poetry, so could someone please illuminate me: I was under the impression the WHOLE FUCKING POINT of a limerick is to be as crass crude tasteless & politically incorrect as possible (& subsequently funny).
Jesus, have they started teaching in schools that you need to look for and evaluate the social message of FUCKING LIMERICKS? yer jest spost ta laff fer chrissakes.
Speaking as someone who has had a formal education in poetry, I'd like to take this opportunity to point out the utter wrongness of your wrong opinions: Your wrong opinions are utterly wrong. The purpose of poetry is to deal with issues. Just read "Unwanted Gift" (http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=2333) if you don't believe me. As a committed Christian and professional van driver, I thought I'd write about some of the issues that I have to deal with everyday. It's because of gay homosexuals that I have to live my life in terrifying fear, with the dark brown cloud of GAIDS forever beluring me to its deadly embrace. I hope that the next time we meet, you won't be so quick to laugh at my personal issues. Afterall, one is constantly reminded of how Jesu dealt with issues, and I'd like to draw your attention, if I may, to The Book of Leviticus, Chapter 15, Verse 19:
And if a woman have an issue, and her issue in her flesh be blood, she shall be put apart seven days: and whosoever toucheth her shall be unclean until the even.
If that's not dealing with issues, I don't know what is.
Thank you and God Bless.
Jesu would be very sad, if he listened to your prayers at all!
Leviticus is old school; Jesu liked to stir it up. He hung with whores and blue-collar (rather, no-collar!!!1111) types, remember? He taught the same to his buds:
"I know and am convinced in the Lord Jesus that nothing is unclean in itself; but to him who thinks anything to be unclean, to him it is unclean." --Romans 14:14
also, the big guy himself spoke to Peter:
"What God has cleansed, no longer consider unholy." --Acts 10:14
oh fuck the Unwanted gift was priceless. Especially the little embedded bit of real poetry. I was flying there right beside you, da. Wallowing in woe.
Speaking of which, I just found out that someone deleted one of their poems because of a comment I made, so tonight I am wallowing in both woe AND guilt, supported by a snort of lagavulin drunk from a demitasse.
speaking of issues european women are different than NA women, one said to me she had her issue and I thought she was being coy and she wasn't, it was a friendly warning in case I cared and i had to throw away an entire set of bedding and she looked at us in the mirror and doubled over giggling saying we looked like pig-killers.
Sawa. She's from washington, and energetic. She wrote a rhyming poem about cherry trees or something, 'n' someone posted "nonsense. Stop rhyming until you know what you're talking about" and they were quite right 'n' I posted an example (non-rhyming) poem that used an image or word from each corresponding line of hers, but that actually made sense as a whole. She sent me a bitter comment and then deleted all her poems :(
It was my understanding that lastobelus was referring to the comments on my poeme rather than to the poeme itself. But maybe I'm wrong. Maybe he does have no grasp on reality. Maybe that's why he was caught sniffing that beggar's nappy. Maybe. I JUST DON'T KNOW.
not only have I no grasp on reality, but reality rarely bothers to grasp ME anymore. I have to grasp myself, and that makes me bored so I lash out. Anyway, I'm very used to people thinking I meant exactly the opposite of what I thought I said, so I've gotten in the habit of saying the opposite of what I mean. Of course, this leads to an escalation of meta-reversals, so I often tend to just resort to obfuscation and muttering.
du bist ganz korrect. Everything you said is true, all of it, even the question mark. Now, a caveat, naturally when I'm in serious mode I'm a staunch supporter of gay rights. I even wanted to get together with a man once, but I couldn't go through with it, for which I esteem myself a lousy coward. But I watched a friend give blow jobs for meth and it didn't affect my feelings of cameraderie with him one little bit no siree. Especially since he had just recently sent me a girl he didn't want, an incredibly gorgeous 19-year old half-asian goth with an iq of 150 who was passively wandering around California doing a kind of 19-year-old hyper-smart goth chick jack kerouac thing. You just can't beat that.
There was a chick once named for a flower
Who posted a sex pome 'bout every hour
Although middle-aged
She became all the rage
Because everyone hoped they might plow her.
oh dear. i haven't been 'all the rage' for quite some time now. mrs.g's had center stage for a longish while. but i thank you for pointing out my middle agE (ugh).
how old are you, then? are you above my 28yr cut off? you boys have learnt some neat tricks by then, mostly.
After I read this poem and reading all of the comments I investigated for myself the origin of aids. It was actually a bacteria found in monkeys in south Africa, you wanna know how it came to America? Some sicko did a monkey in the bum, contracted the disease and then did his gay friend in the bum who then turned around and did about 25 others gay guys in the bum. Before you knew it gay people were havin sex with women durring their threesomes and gave it to them. So when the infected women did it with straight guys they got it too. All becuz some dude down in Africa got lonely and raped a monkey in the bum, now THAT is sick and disturbing. If all you people really think this is a horrible disease then you wouldnt stick up for gay people, what they do is unnatural and debase, more aids are passed between gay lovers then anyother source. I find it horrible that innocent people contract this disease and have to live with it. But that doesnt happen exponentially, what does happen alot is gay guys doing other gay guys up the bum. I cant for the life of me understand why anyone would think that homosexuality is normal, IT ISNT, waste comes out of your bum, a bum was not designed to have a wiener in it. What exactly does a penis in the bum do? Nothing! A penis goes in a vagina!!! Its that simple, you do it for making babies and populating the planet. IF the whole world were gay it would die and nothing would last very long. Two men cannot have kids, all they can do is have gay sex and spread diseases. Homosexuality is a mental disease, you are not born with it you slowly become it from what you do. PEOPLE think before you stand up for gay people, they dont need you to stand up for them, what they need is counseling becuase they are screwed up. They need love, just like any other person with problems.
VIRUS U TWIT. how on earth do you expect a reader to take your comment seriously if out the gate you're legless. Good god. Viruses and bacteria are night and day man. It's like you just described godzilla to a japanese kid as a green prehistoric chilidog that hates big monkeys.
Ok im sorry, the VIRUS, speaking of viruses do you just follow me around trying to make me look stupid, you do a good job, but thats not the point. The point is, stop leaving all these retarded comments after mine or on my poems, every body already know my poem suck you dont have to keep reminding them, man horus, your such a scallywag somtimes i swear.
The memory this brings would warrent me to sing as I remember a pair of gay pants. In a van they were found on top of a mound of other people's stuff. Indeed they had GAIDS but the owner was swayed not to believe anyone. Try as we could to show him he should go and retrieve his gay pants. All he did was rebuff the accusation of his stuff, and refused to move 'his' gay pants. No more could we take, for Jesu's sake, these infernal gay pants. We cast them asunder but this was a blunder as they spread the disease around.
um, somebody gave this a 10 because that is where the spinning wheel of his or her mouse landed. Do you not know that all voting on this site is arbitrary??? Well, maybe not all, because apparently there are some not with the program. here's my spin....
It doesn't... I decided to start posting with some earlier work, figuring that with proper critiquing I can create something beyond the teenage "I'm mad at the world and wanna wallow in misery" bit...
I dont know who in their right mind would even consider giving THIS poem a 10..It's pure garbage..Thats all I can say..You Suck and Your Poem Sucks.. -0-
This "darkangel" is a literary genius. Leave him alone. He's clearly a bummer with no friends. Apart from his poetry. Which is incredible and should be published.
I assume you draw on some of the poetic greats of years gone by. If Byron were alive today, I truly believe that he would be tackling these very issues.
Lord Byron couldn't tackle a cane that part timed as an opium pipe with a pair of birch tits carved into it.
But I agree with you on your other observations.
Maybe he couldn't have. However, neither canes nor opium pipes (with or without a pair of birch tits carved into them) have anything to do with my comment.
Good Day.
"If God had meant for men to have sex with other men then he would have put holes in their butts..." or so I've heard from certain individuals who've lost the ability to discern excrement from extreme snowboot shinola.
I'd just like to wish everyone on poemeranker a very happy World AIDS Day. (For those that don't know, the 1st of December is a very special time of year when people of all faiths and sexual orientations come together to celebrate AIDS.)
First, be adult enough not to answer my comment with some poisoned barb. . .
I do believe you achieved your goal - this little tit
has garnered more comments than decent ones.
I was a Hospice Nurse for 25 years and regard AIDS
with respect, presenting it in ways that will uplift and educate.
It is you who needs to grow up. Honestly, your reaction to this poeme was the default 10-year-old-girl reaction to anything they know mummy wouldn't approve of. I can't bear to imagine the look on your face as you knowingly informed me about your uplifting and educational AIDS presentations. My God don't I look silly now? Here I am poking fun at AIDS, while people like you are out there confronting the realities of this terrible disease: martyring yourselves at the local hospice, confronting AIDS prejudice wherever it rears its ugly head, handing out AIDS fun-packs to all the kids, telling people that "gays aren't the only people who get the AIDS!"
There once was a poett named D'Angel
Whose words try to be quite playful
He'll work up a rhyme
tho' he'll often commit grime
'cause to others he's often quite hateful.
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so bland and without taste.
I hope you have time.
because reading this,
mine was a waste............
Go ahead and seek what you [wish] to reap for you will be pushed like a beaver up the stream - dam-ned to succeed.
Your sarchasm is not as [deep] as you may feel.
IT WOULD MEAN SO MUCH TO ME.
but since i was not yet a man
It melted my nipple
(now called a schmipple)
coloring, was never that simple!
There once was some AIDS in a crayon,
Which I scribbled all over a Mayan.
They cremated his body,
But the admin was shoddy:
His ashes were sealed in a gay urn!!!!!!
Jesus, have they started teaching in schools that you need to look for and evaluate the social message of FUCKING LIMERICKS? yer jest spost ta laff fer chrissakes.
Speaking as someone who has had a formal education in poetry, I'd like to take this opportunity to point out the utter wrongness of your wrong opinions: Your wrong opinions are utterly wrong. The purpose of poetry is to deal with issues. Just read "Unwanted Gift" (http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.
And if a woman have an issue, and her issue in her flesh be blood, she shall be put apart seven days: and whosoever toucheth her shall be unclean until the even.
If that's not dealing with issues, I don't know what is.
Thank you and God Bless.
Leviticus is old school; Jesu liked to stir it up. He hung with whores and blue-collar (rather, no-collar!!!1111) types, remember? He taught the same to his buds:
"I know and am convinced in the Lord Jesus that nothing is unclean in itself; but to him who thinks anything to be unclean, to him it is unclean." --Romans 14:14
also, the big guy himself spoke to Peter:
"What God has cleansed, no longer consider unholy." --Acts 10:14
thank YOU, and Jesu bless!
Speaking of which, I just found out that someone deleted one of their poems because of a comment I made, so tonight I am wallowing in both woe AND guilt, supported by a snort of lagavulin drunk from a demitasse.
speaking of issues european women are different than NA women, one said to me she had her issue and I thought she was being coy and she wasn't, it was a friendly warning in case I cared and i had to throw away an entire set of bedding and she looked at us in the mirror and doubled over giggling saying we looked like pig-killers.
I'm such a terrible bastard.
I truly meant my comment to be helpful, I really did.
i think i'll write you a poem.
not only do you have "no formal education in poetry," you also have no grasp on reality!
Further weakening my frangible hold on reality.
Who posted a sex pome 'bout every hour
Although middle-aged
She became all the rage
Because everyone hoped they might plow her.
how old are you, then? are you above my 28yr cut off? you boys have learnt some neat tricks by then, mostly.
but I'll never outgrow being horny
I ain't got no tricks
'least none I admits
But my lovemaking ain't ever boring
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3char1per
You're not a very nice person, and your poetry follows your attitude - it's not nice either.
I assume you draw on some of the poetic greats of years gone by. If Byron were alive today, I truly believe that he would be tackling these very issues.
But I agree with you on your other observations.
Good Day.
All my life I've been asking men: "Am I having gay sex with you, or hetero sex?"
By the way; does Nature still fabricate amoebae like Blindproject217? Gasp.
I do believe you achieved your goal - this little tit
has garnered more comments than decent ones.
I was a Hospice Nurse for 25 years and regard AIDS
with respect, presenting it in ways that will uplift and educate.
You're an incredibly babyish person.
Whose words try to be quite playful
He'll work up a rhyme
tho' he'll often commit grime
'cause to others he's often quite hateful.
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