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Shimmer of Tears (Free verse) by angel_uy You turn away from the universe
And the world leaves you,
His shadow falls over you
Like a spiritless dream.
Darkened into lonelyness
Lifes breath slips though you.
As you fall under loves mist,
The morning chill whispers across you.
As you look in the distance
A shimmer of him shows in a tear.
Up the ladder:
feather duster
Down the ladder:
Your Guiding Light
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Posted: November 5, 2002 12:04 PM PST; Last modified: November 5, 2002 12:04 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.9403987 Overall Rank: 9029 Comments:
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Caducus @ 62.105.88.10
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17-Apr-03/8:14 AM
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Not sure about lifes breath and loneliness you have spelled wrong other than that its quite a nice mad 5 minutes you had in writing this. 6
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