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Shimmer of Tears (Free verse) by angel_uy

You turn away from the universe And the world leaves you, His shadow falls over you Like a spiritless dream. Darkened into lonelyness Lifes breath slips though you. As you fall under loves mist, The morning chill whispers across you. As you look in the distance A shimmer of him shows in a tear.

Caducus 17-Apr-03/8:14 AM
Not sure about lifes breath and loneliness you have spelled wrong other than that its quite a nice mad 5 minutes you had in writing this. 6




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