Temptation In Genesis

by scitz

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Apr 2003 · Edited 1 Apr 2003 · 2 comments

Adam ate the apple, And Temptation consumed him, Lucifer preened God. =============== by caducus ===============

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[0] poetandknowit 1-Apr-03/10:06 AM Reply

This seems more like some young attempt to desperately try to say something deep and profound to make the reader shutter in awe. But as a haiku it really says nothing much. Look to the origins; find the eastern spirit of the form. This just mocks it. But, hey, who needs Shakespeare, eh?

[n/a] Caducus 1-Apr-03/10:18 AM Reply

Found this hard PAKI. I have done the 5-7-5 thing and I wouldn't exactly say I was looking to say something profound I was just experimenting. The last line referes to the Old Testament which I find interesting because thats when God and Lucifer were both in heaven before our old pal Satan got kicked out for being rather handsome (amongst other things). Lines one and two were just set pieces for the ending, and irony and a possibility.
Thanks for the civil tongue, How would you do it please reply?