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Temptation In Genesis (Haiku) by scitz

Adam ate the apple, And Temptation consumed him, Lucifer preened God. =============== by caducus ===============

Caducus 1-Apr-03/10:18 AM
Found this hard PAKI. I have done the 5-7-5 thing and I wouldn't exactly say I was looking to say something profound I was just experimenting. The last line referes to the Old Testament which I find interesting because thats when God and Lucifer were both in heaven before our old pal Satan got kicked out for being rather handsome (amongst other things). Lines one and two were just set pieces for the ending, and irony and a possibility.
Thanks for the civil tongue, How would you do it please reply?




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