Comments byCaducus, 401–420 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Hot Potato by Shardik 20 Jun 2003, 1:47 AM
YYYYYYep ! that'll get rid of em ! 8
on Taliban Ambush by scitz 5 Jun 2003, 9:04 AM
Fine
on Timing by INTRANSIT 27 May 2003, 3:47 PM
loved it 10
on Continuation by baughworm 14 May 2003, 9:03 AM
A vivid, classy poem big on imagery and very flow like. 9
on Be Not Afraid Of Dying. by Mr Pig 12 May 2003, 8:09 AM
not your best but still good and a message of hope that i liked 8
on Released by INTRANSIT 28 Apr 2003, 8:56 AM
Black and white inspiration - photos - always so much more enamouring than color. This is a long poem from you I like its relaxed narrative telling a story from a vantage point of perspective coming alive from the 'phone call' which is where this poem to me became quite moving. Your prize is ...8
on Staying Sane by ThoughtfulSoul 24 Apr 2003, 9:31 AM
Are you plasticgirlwithgun? Where is plasticgirlwithgun I miss that posh forked tongue.

This makes you sound a bit pathetic, insanity is recommended for anyone on ranker, see you in the canteen with angelina and winona and we'll smoke a bleeding fist over processed tuna and big momma.

on almost by wordho 24 Apr 2003, 9:26 AM
Interesting choice of subject but dealt with heavy handedly.Define what you are saying with more originality you must compete with the subject and make it a little more engaging. Liked the lines 1-6, (6
on Pale Blue Horizon by tranceformer 24 Apr 2003, 9:20 AM
Cool, liked it.
8
on I am a dream by mozac 24 Apr 2003, 9:17 AM
Good Execution, and the explanation helped.

Eyes on you. 8
on The Widow by e1ementfire 24 Apr 2003, 9:14 AM
a real mixed bag here, liked the spider connotation(s) but it seems in parts redundant of meaning.6
on underwater by tranceformer 24 Apr 2003, 9:13 AM
leda is right, it starts strong then gave me a major headfuck
on Jenny Jones, Jenny Jones by bondjedi 24 Apr 2003, 9:11 AM
Yeah get rid of babydaddy, otherwise a bit of a cult scrawl 7
replying on A Love Story For The Dead by Caducus 24 Apr 2003, 8:34 AM
Thanks Horus, I have changed the ending. The end meant something but sounded funny begging to be misinterpreted so this fits better.
on The Bleeding Rose by BleedingRose 24 Apr 2003, 8:19 AM
I got a love/hate thing going on with this, hmmm
replying on Before The Miscarriage. by scitz 24 Apr 2003, 8:16 AM
what do you mean by fuck all Z?
on Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT 23 Apr 2003, 8:58 AM
With exception to that poem about you ripping the guts from the clock, this is your best, highly deserving all the praise. I've read 2 brilliant poems today and before thats spoiled I am logging off - 10 Cest Parfait
on visual erotic by princesszoe 21 Apr 2003, 2:34 AM
A exfoliation of lust, like sugarcane.8
on Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8 21 Apr 2003, 2:29 AM
This one got my pants in a flymo, very cutting (literally)
on Leaves by danny duke age 9 17 Apr 2003, 8:28 AM
Hey Danny !

If you are indeed a 9 year old this is a brave effort mate. Good use of rhyme and you stuck to to the subject well. Keep writing and good luck with your poetry heres an 8.