| Re: Hot Potato by Shardik |
20-Jun-03/1:47 AM |
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YYYYYYep ! that'll get rid of em ! 8
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| Re: Taliban Ambush by scitz |
5-Jun-03/9:04 AM |
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| Re: Timing by INTRANSIT |
27-May-03/3:47 PM |
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| Re: Continuation by baughworm |
14-May-03/9:03 AM |
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A vivid, classy poem big on imagery and very flow like. 9
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| Re: Be Not Afraid Of Dying. by Mr Pig |
12-May-03/8:09 AM |
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not your best but still good and a message of hope that i liked 8
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| Re: Released by INTRANSIT |
28-Apr-03/8:56 AM |
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Black and white inspiration - photos - always so much more enamouring than color. This is a long poem from you I like its relaxed narrative telling a story from a vantage point of perspective coming alive from the 'phone call' which is where this poem to me became quite moving. Your prize is ...8
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| Re: Staying Sane by ThoughtfulSoul |
24-Apr-03/9:31 AM |
Are you plasticgirlwithgun? Where is plasticgirlwithgun I miss that posh forked tongue.
This makes you sound a bit pathetic, insanity is recommended for anyone on ranker, see you in the canteen with angelina and winona and we'll smoke a bleeding fist over processed tuna and big momma.
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| Re: almost by wordho |
24-Apr-03/9:26 AM |
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Interesting choice of subject but dealt with heavy handedly.Define what you are saying with more originality you must compete with the subject and make it a little more engaging. Liked the lines 1-6, (6
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| Re: Pale Blue Horizon by tranceformer |
24-Apr-03/9:20 AM |
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| Re: I am a dream by mozac |
24-Apr-03/9:17 AM |
Good Execution, and the explanation helped.
Eyes on you. 8
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| Re: The Widow by e1ementfire |
24-Apr-03/9:14 AM |
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a real mixed bag here, liked the spider connotation(s) but it seems in parts redundant of meaning.6
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| Re: underwater by tranceformer |
24-Apr-03/9:13 AM |
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leda is right, it starts strong then gave me a major headfuck
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| Re: Jenny Jones, Jenny Jones by bondjedi |
24-Apr-03/9:11 AM |
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Yeah get rid of babydaddy, otherwise a bit of a cult scrawl 7
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| Re: a comment on A Love Story For The Dead by Caducus |
24-Apr-03/8:34 AM |
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Thanks Horus, I have changed the ending. The end meant something but sounded funny begging to be misinterpreted so this fits better.
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| Re: The Bleeding Rose by BleedingRose |
24-Apr-03/8:19 AM |
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I got a love/hate thing going on with this, hmmm
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| Re: a comment on Before The Miscarriage. by scitz |
24-Apr-03/8:16 AM |
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what do you mean by fuck all Z?
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| Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT |
23-Apr-03/8:58 AM |
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With exception to that poem about you ripping the guts from the clock, this is your best, highly deserving all the praise. I've read 2 brilliant poems today and before thats spoiled I am logging off - 10 Cest Parfait
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| Re: visual erotic by princesszoe |
21-Apr-03/2:34 AM |
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A exfoliation of lust, like sugarcane.8
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| Re: Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8 |
21-Apr-03/2:29 AM |
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This one got my pants in a flymo, very cutting (literally)
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| Re: Leaves by danny duke age 9 |
17-Apr-03/8:28 AM |
Hey Danny !
If you are indeed a 9 year old this is a brave effort mate. Good use of rhyme and you stuck to to the subject well. Keep writing and good luck with your poetry heres an 8.
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